It's raining inside
his convex lenses as well.
His son won't return.
A contest entry
- Rainy Day Haiku by azure85.
600 points, ended November 10, 2007, 51 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Outstanding. Powerful piece. Nice word choice with "convex". You paint a somber day that matches his grief.
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Awesome! A very emotional moment captured in a tiny haiku beautifully. It is really a different angle to the word "rain". It is a true and realistic picture of of internal trauma. This haiku really touched my heart.
A real piece of poetry.
Congratulations!
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This is one of the BEST poems I have read on this site.
You are FANTASTIC. This is the best haiku I have read ever. Three small lines saying the entire story.
I simply loved this poem!!
Fantastic, simply too GOOD!!!!
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Namaste.
Thanks for the kind comments Nivedita ji.
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deep. congrats on the silver.
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Okay! I read the first two lines at the contest site and wondered if line 3 could pull it off. It does. Suggests without explaining. Opens up emotionally, imagistically. Well don/
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Ohhh what a heartbreaking haiku, you captured something special in this piece, special and unique... best of luck to you in this contest
Karen -
wow!!!
too good!!!!
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It's raining inside
his convex lenses as well.
His son won't return
Oh my, so emotion and the turmoil of a rainy day inside. Well done, you cry along with the father.
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