FORGOTTEN AND ALONE
I Once Knew A Girl,
Her Hair Full Of Curl,
Now Shes Lost In This World Of Spiraling Swirl,
No One Knows Were She Is 'Oh What Fools'
She's Sitting On Her Bed Wondering If She Will Find That One Tool
Yet She's Stuck, Stuck On The Spool Of Life,
She Has All These Scars From The Black Handled Knife,
She Just Stays There And Cries,
Cries For Help Looking Around For Something, Someone To Stop The Pain,
The Pain Thats Eating Her Away Into The Dark, The Dark Of The Knife
And The Deep Brown Of The Rope
The Bright White From The Headlights Getting Closer
She Falls Apart As Yooh Sip Yoor Coffee Like Yoor Blinded From Her Pain,
Death Gets Closer With Each Hospital Trip Yoor dragged Out Of Bed To Make,
She Still Sits On Her Bed For A Way Out,
Lost Her Friends,
Losing He Family,
She's Forgotten And Alone,
Tears Fall Down Her Face As The Train Gets Closer,
Laying On The Tracks She Yells Too The World ''YOOH HAVE BEATEN ME!''
The Train Slices Through The Girls Legs And Her Head Leaves Her Body With More Salted Tears Then Blood
A contest entry
- All Forms, All Subjects by something wicked.
600 points, ended November 24, 2007, 32 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Say That Again? by C J Weatherholt.
525 points, ended December 12, 2007, 62 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
let me know what yooh think please
Comments
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Immediately this is something I can relate to. It reminds me of the poem I wrote "Lies" and the way I felt during that time. As you go through things seem to be distorted like "Yooh" and "Yoor" not sure why you used it to emphasize "you" and "your" I'm not sure if it was intended to catch my attention or not. The poem over all is wonderful, but the ending throws me a little. I wouldn't have thought to put that much description into the last two lines, when throughout it was kind of mysterious and dark. Overall an enjoyable read! Thanks for entering my contest!
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