You know they have a new six star hotel
Where your slightest whim is responded by a bell
Did you know men glorify men and their stature
To distract from a gloomy world rapture
When you choose not to understand are you less guilty
Are you less responsible cause your hands aren't filthy
With the blood of a severed breast so a child will die
What you do not see my friends, is not an alibi
Can you feel the pangs and the screams of children gone mad
Induced with demons and drugs to carry out another mans plan
A blood written decree to end lives of innocent others
Is it easier for you to sleep to not see them as brothers
We share a world, a home, a planet and soil
Perhaps your emptiness is caused by this toil
We share energy and when you close it out
It reaps in a swarm and emminates as doubt
Would you you rescue a baby lying in the street
Would you stand and watch a woman get beat
Would you just lie back and continue to read your magazine
Filled with with disgusting things that have no meaning
I have a hope in man that many may not see
It's just waiting to be clearly seen
I see no evil, hear no evil, speak no evil
And this is why the evil eats me
I have a faith that exceeds this hell
But it doesn't start with a stupid six star hotel
Author notes
I truly believe we have the capability to end world hunger. If you are wondering, a six star hotel is the first of it's kind( as opposed to the nicest 5 star hotels ). If this is the direction we are heading we are in trouble. A new plane ride was auctioned off at over $10,0000 yesterday for a seven hour flight. I don't hate the rich but let's all speak out. You are guilty if you close your eyes.
A contest entry
- Dreaming For Darfur....The End Is Near! by darkknight marellus.
1200 points, ended December 26, 2007, 18 entries
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This is amazing. I totaly believe that the world closes their eyes to what they don't want to see, their ears to what they don't want to hear, and they never speek up for what's right. No one ever need's to go hungrey but no one ever wan'ts to help.
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First the little things that got to me:
"Is it easier for you to sleep to not see them as brothers"
I think that it'd be better if you wrote: "Is it easier for you sleep by not seeing them as brothers" (3rd stanza).
"Would you just lie back and continue to read your magazine
Filled with with disgusting things that have no meaning"
I don't think that 'magazine' and 'meaning' can rhyme here, but maybe if you rewrote the last line as "Filled with disgusting things that don't mean a thing". That's just my opinion, how I probably would've written it. (5th stanza)
In the 6th stanza you lost your rhyme-scheme, and overall the punctuation could be better, but I like how you didn't make it to fit a certain style.
On to the good stuff.
I think here you've got a really good point, that so many people are living the posh and 'good' life, while many, many more live below the poverty line. How can we all stand to live in an ignorant way when we all can contribute? I like the message here, that you don't have to be rich to have a great life, that by contributing you can create something more in your world. Thanks for entering!
Akasha
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Excellent!!! Way to go !! To many stand by and watch when all it needs is for is for the many to take part.We can make a difference. Thank you speaking out in this powerfull piece...well done...mal
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I am without words at the moment.
This truly impacted me like no other poem I've read in the past few days, and I've read at least fifty or sixty poems since yesterday. Within these words, I cannot agree with you more. It reminds me that we have morphed into a materialistic society, and lost base with what is truly important, which is really each other. So often, we close our eyes to what we don't want to see.
When I look at my own kids, and how we struggle at times, I try to think about what hardships others face. As long as we continue to walk around with blinders on to the harsh realities that plague so many, we will continue to deterioriate something that is truly precious. I can't imagine a life plauged by hunger and despair, and the "screams of children gone mad." This touched me on so many levels.
Can you feel the pangs and the screams of children gone mad
Induced with demons and drugs to carry out another mans plan
A blood written decree to end lives of innocent others
Is it easier for you to sleep to not see them as brothers
Don
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THOUGHT PROVOKING
There is much wisdom in your words and I wish it could be read by all...To end the hunger, to relieve the pain, shelter the homeless and protect the innocent...The rich get richer and the poor get poorer...shame the ways of some men!...Thank you so much for sharing with me
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Wow, this is really beautifully written, with an impeccable rhythm. I also agree with your author notes, too many people do close their eyes. <3 Jojo
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Hey whatsa goin on. Thank you for your comments on hear no evil, see no evil. I just wanted to say hi to one of my favorite poets. Hi @@ Angel.
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