From the road
you can see small houses
amid trees on the hillside.
Slate rooftops bathed
in the greys of the moon.
Amber rows
of dimly lit windows,
from chimneys
faint traces of smoke.
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You paint a picture I see everyday but you made it special. Well done
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I utterly adore the picture you painted with your words, its vivid and calming, peaceful and quiet, beautiful.
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Vivid and perfectly captured. Lovely as always.
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I can picture it... very vivid imagery... reminds me of a Rockwell painting but makes me wonder what is behind the surface of such a picturesque scene...
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can fit every season
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Thank you for the view! It is romantic! Because it is Fall now, the hues are splendid with the moon's glow as their spotlight. Your poem is filled with picturesque words and sets a serene mood. Beautiful!
Much Love & Respect ♥
Renee
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Nice vignette . . .
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Beautiful
I just dropped by on a "return the complement" basis after your kind comment on my contest entry. I was really pleased to find this poem, such a clear picture from such accurately selected words. I will be back to read more.
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loved this--it reminds me of houses seen from country roads during the time between fall and winter (when the cold really comes), and the sky has just enough moon for reflection
very nice with just a few precise words
Saffron
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I commented on this one didn't I?
I see you did some editing too. Very nicely done. Still love that 2 line stanza.
Desiree
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Fantastic
As somebody who spends alot of time meandering aimlessly around, well, everywhere, i can say in all good conscience; hell yes. The total absence of people or active movement really conveys the sense of observing these things from the road.
Well done, sir -
I have been driving through Ferni British Columbi twice a day on my way to Calgery and your poem fits perfectly the sights that I see. You have that flare with your poems. It allows one to see images I think that is important in poetry.
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I love the way you paint a picture with your words. So soft and delicate like petals from a rose on one's skin.
This brought memories of cozy homes and Christmas or Thanksgiving going on behind those chimneys.
Love it Al...
Becky
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This brought to mind .. those oil paintings you can find all over the place, the ones of autumn .. there's always a house, sometimes a creek, and leaves ...and well you get the idea..
It's extremely visual.. an art .. for so few words..
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Picturesque
You are a painter of words~oils.
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as i told you before-
this is very kooseresque .. can you think of a higher compliment from me?
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not really, high praise indeed...
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Seems I missed the earlier, but that is irrelevant.
love that i can see the cityscape in this, and the comfort of life going on outside the window. at least that is how the poet speaks to ME with this one.
imagery that warms a cold fall evening.
inspired, as always.
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I adore the second stanza! I love moon poems, and this one (although not solely focused on the moon) is no different Al.
Cleverly worded and vividly drawn.
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Interesting poem ..
but I'm not sure what it has to do with this contest. Nothing, I'd surmise.
Perhaps you'd care to explain?
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This is lovely, Al.... very distinct visuals in this one - wonderful poetry...
~ Nicolette
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