sitting on my bed
my life's music running through my head
just how did i receive
this hole in my chest that makes it hard to breathe?
typical story-he loved and left
cliched-but that doesn't make it hurt any less
silence pressing in on all sides
in the darklight where i hide
i found you here, so linger for a while
i'd kill to see your beautiful smiles
my memories twist with time
i barely remember when you were mine
a little lost girl i was
then you found me-we formed us
i begged don't leave me
soon was alone sobbing
the hole smoulders even now
beads of sweat caress my brow
i rock back and forth, drowning in pain
my heart still fully in your reign
bitter taste clogs my throat
at the thought of you snatching my hope
when you stalked out the door
i curled up on the dank floor
so why did i get chosen to receive
this hole in my chest that makes it hard to breathe?
A contest entry
- THE HOLE IN YOUR HEART by Regretlove.
400 points, ended November 26, 2007, 29 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Throw yourself into my arms (Be inspired) by Nolliedog.
450 points, ended December 12, 2007, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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450 points, ended December 24, 2007, 44 entries
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450 points, ended February 5, 2008, 27 entries
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Comments
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Beautiful piece you penned here. Great job. The imagery and flow blended well together. Best wishes to you and thanks for sharing this with me. Keep that pen handy dear poet.
♥ Touchof1der -
wonderfully written lots of emotion. I really enjoyed this thanks for sharing and I wish you good luck in the contest.
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hard to breathe...
amen...been there, done that...and it sucks...
but your poem is simply beautiful...
you have penned that hole in chest into bronze in chest of trophies...
very well done indeed!
may fresh air sweep you away today...
Blessings! Tammy
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Thanks for a great write
Thank you so much for entering the contest I really enjoyed your writing, the rhyme scheme was very fluid, and the subject of your poem was moving and captivating. Thank you for entering the contest and best of luck
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Awww I really liked it! It was really good! I love it!
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