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Life

Life isn't easy
in fact it's incredibly difficult.
We're all under pressure;
our jobs,
our schoolwork,
our families,
but we march on.
We go through our actions automatically
without thought or enthusiasm.
But all it takes is one thing to scare us,
and bring us back from the monotonous.
A near death experience,
even a single phone call.
Everything goes back to normal
and the cycle continues.
We march with the weight of the world on our shoulders
and for a moment,
a single fleeting moment
we are released.
We cry,
we get scared,
and nothing else matters.

Author notes

Something loosely based on the song "Under Pressure" by David Bowie and Queen.

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  • Hija of the King
    September 3
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    So true so true. Awesome write!


  • Kappa Pyua
    August 22, 2008

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    Sounds more true then some wish to believe. Hard times are upon many. While others choose a harder path. We pray and hope for better days. Thanks for sharing these thoughts. UNT


  • Polaja Greeters member
    February 7, 2008
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    This is a thoughtprovoking poem... I like the idea that the non-monotonous thing is fear... this poem has a very strong message... have you thought about attempting a different way of presenting it? It could add to the power of your words - just a thought

    Keep writing

    Polly

  • animalbar07
    February 3, 2008

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    This poem is quite alright.
    But, I would suggest more poetic words...it sounds kind of like a speech, as of now.
    It's nice though, and I can see where you're coming from!
    Have a great day and DON'T FORGET TO SMILE =


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    February 3, 2008
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    we are released.
    We cry,
    we get scared,
    and nothing else matters.

    This is just wonderful and heartfelt statement made in poetry revealing the universal truth of life and you have touched the core of the momments which are the so called defination of the life..your description part too is quite powerful and true as well..a great write indeed.


  • SignifyingNothing
    February 2, 2008
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    Wow, really cool! I love the message of this, its so unique. I never thought about how fear pulls us out of the monotony of life, and,for an instant, makes us realize what is really important in life, the good things. I honestly never thought of that before. Sort of the upside to trials and fear. Really intriguing and great write.


    • A Leper Messiah
      February 2, 2008
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      Thank you for the comment. You really grasped what I was trying to convey.


  • awannabepoet
    February 2, 2008

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    Pure expression

    How young the heart that would see the world in such a way, surely you understand how the world is a cold and heartless place where Time takes center stage, yes Time that bandit that he is steals the life from us all and leaves us ready to expire.

    Life your life from within, follow what is in your heart and you will cease to live your life automatically, breath that passion in and share it with all those would listen.

    Life your live as it would be your last.

    I like it, I like it so!


  • e m i l y
    January 31, 2008

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    We're all pressured sometimes.
    Of course when work and school
    build up we get stressed.
    I find that when i cry I feel better,
    even if it's only for a minute.


  • michichoeret
    January 30, 2008

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    great write

    but had problems with the last 3 lines. the transition is a bit unlear. from release to crying and fear. can't you work the transition out a bit more?

  • pruedence
    January 29, 2008

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    You words ring true for us all. We can never seem to excape from the daily routine except for grief, a simple phone call can make all change. But yes then we just get back onto the some old road. Thanks for sharing


  • you20give20me20hope
    November 6, 2007

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    Very good job. I know those feelings all the time. Life is difficult, but yet everyone can fine the courage to get through it.


  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    November 3, 2007

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    Excellent/imaginative/intriguing

    A rather unique write, methinks, yet am not sure I totally agree with your basic premise. None the less, very well written.

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