No longer afraid of death, no longer afraid of what it means to die.
She weeps; no longer afraid of what comes after life.
Her fear has left her; replaced by desperation.
She’s like a stone basin, cold and blank.
Nothing can change her now.
She too far gone to reach.
Her happiness has died,
everything she’s ever loved washed away with the rain.
She sits in a void,
staring blankly at the world though she doesn’t see a thing.
A thousand things race through her mind,
like what she could have done.
Why’d it have to end like this?
It all seems so unfair.
Everyone is gone and she is left to think,
so many things race through her mind.
They had made her so happy,
although she never belonged in their world.
They were so different,
and she fell madly in love.
She wanted to stop crying, to stop screaming out in pain;
what she wanted was to die.
For it all to go away,
to never feel again;
it would be amazing.
To see her loves again,
she can’t bear the pain of missing them.
The pain is worse than you could imagine,
It’s pricking her like a thousand pins.
Her love had died along with all emotion,
to commit so many sins.
And as she weeps,
she feels so empty.
Author notes
I poured my heart into this poem and cried while I wrote it. I gave it my everything and it gave me a headache. These are my emotions, I bare them for everyone to see.
In a list
A contest entry
- Frozen Sadness - xx by The Hardest Goodbye.
900 points, ended May 5, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I'm not sure I got the right message across. So tell me what my poem said to you?
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wow .. I know I use this word alot, but this poem was amazing. The emotions in this are so strong and deep. It was so saddening but I really enjoyed reading it, thank you so much for entering it in my contest =D
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Very deep and heartfelt...strong write of emotions which flow through ink and pen...as I read your words I felt as if I was living the moment and it was full of pain...wonderfully done...
Best to you!
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phenominal
"They had made her so happy,
although she never belonged in their world.
They were so different,
and she fell madly in love"
Those lines really caught my eye; flawlessly beautiful!
This poem captivated me with the first line and held me completely through the entire thing. I related instantly and felt a piece of your pain. Excellent write!
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WOW
This was Amazing! I could feel myself tear up while reading it. Great Job! -
STUNNING!
I felt as though I steeped into someone else's body as I read this. You truly have the talent of transporting one right into the fray of your emotions, EXCELENT!
MANY BLESSINGS GYPSY.
YOUR FRIEND IN POETRY,
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Overall it's a good poem, it's just on a cliche topic and nothing terribly new was introduced. One thing I can definitely say is that the ending is great. It's simple, but it's really effective. Thanks for sharing.
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Oh wow, this is a great write! It shows that you poured your everything into this.
Very sad imagery and powerful descriptions of your thoughts and feelings.
Sad, touching, dark and beautiful.
If you don't mind I'd like to add this to my list of my favorites by favorites.
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Wow. This one's really well done, and really powerful. I could tell you meant this. Keep it up.
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