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The Mom and wife, together they sat.

  Tears just filled ther eyes.

How could this happen to their man.

  This was not a fair trade.

 

How could she tell the children.

  The ones he held and loved.

Expecially the one he never saw.

  The day and night will never be the same.

 

She lay her head in the shoulder of a mother.

  Who lost her only son.

She would have to tell his father some how.

  Would he understand what she was saying.

 

Mother said "Cry it out child, for God will understand."

  "I'll be here to help take his place for the loving of each child."

"We will make it through each day."

   "God will see to that."

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  • raspberry Greeters member
    November 14, 2007
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    Very very emotional.. so much felt and expressed in this short.. lovely piece..


  • Layne
    November 12, 2007

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    This was very touching, very raw emotion and sadness- I loved this line "I'll be here to help take his place for the loving of each child."- great job


  • BurmaShave
    November 11, 2007

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    Yes, very sad indeed. Good job of expressing the emotion of these two. A little not, my friend, you have misspelled their in the second line, probably just a typo.


  • Princess Perdue gold member
    November 7, 2007

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    What a sad write, but very lovely too...you have written this with a soft and delicate pen, but a little anger and sadness is clearly seen in these lovely lines. Well done and good luck in the contest.

    Shaz xx


  • Lyndon gold member
    November 7, 2007

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    Supreme sacrifice

    warnms the patriotic heart but leaves each family empty, in grief. Your words say this in verse and dialogue. Thank you. Ron.


  • Swangrnv gold member
    November 6, 2007

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    sad

    and very hard to deal with when the subject of death
    is at hand, and though it happens to all of us in our time it's made harder when loved ones are left behind.
    good write!


  • rufina caraid gold member
    November 4, 2007
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    Oh my word! This is powerful poetry. The countless times this would have happened over the last 100 years alone would amaze us no doubt. The 2 women who loved this man will now become closer because of the children left fatherless. War and people who promote it have a lot to answer for. Good Luck with this in the contest, superbly written. Von


  • Legend silver member
    November 4, 2007

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    Medals while worthily won are no compensation for the price many pay to receive them. I think your poem shows this off so wonderfully well A pleasure to read Good luck in the contest


  • R S Adams Jr silver member
    November 4, 2007

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    so sad

    this poem has brought tears to my eyes. It is an expression of pure agony and a grief I know, when a loved one dies. But, this is worse because it is an unnecessary death, and I can hear the cries of the ones who should not be left behind right now.

    These horrors happen on both sides of the ocean and show us the true sadness of war. Well done.

    Now to dry my eyes...

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