When I die will I be remembered
Or forgotten,
As if their mind was hindered?
Will there be love?
Or strife?
For that could be the reason I was taken from this life.
Will you sit out and stare unto the sun
Or for some reason will life become undone?
When I die will there be memories of the past?
For we all know I cannot last.
Will you sing hyms to honor my name
Or will you look at life, always the same?
When I die will my past life mirror my sins
Or will it be a fresh start
Just waiting to begin?
As I grow numb
I remember your eyes.
So before I bid you fairwell
My heart flies
If my love was ever known
Bring me back
Take me home.
Author notes
these are question that have been buzzing around in my head.
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Amazing.
Insomnia is worth it, for reading this.
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im sorry? im afraid i dont understand what you mean????
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It means that I wrote that comment at a very late time in the day/night.
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oh well thank you for the comment. im glad you enjoyed it.
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thank you so much for this entry into the contest for billie jo lato. i wish you the best of luck in the judging process.
viyanna rosemarie
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Awesome ending! the ending was like really simple and... basically u ended this piece perfectly! And those questions... gosh i can relate! i mean, i ask those questions often too, and i guess it'll just remain a mystery wont they? >.< We'll just have to wait and see... great job!
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This is a very good write I like it and I wish I could answer the questions but as soon as I get the answers life changes all the questions....thank you for entering....
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I love it....it's amazing.
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Ahhh .. the ancient request...please remember me.
When we take photo's we say, hey I was here..please remember me..
We write our words and scream at the sky to be remembered.
This outstanding piece makes you adding me as a favorite,
a prized complement.
MANY MANY BLESSINGS GYPSY,
LOWELL POE.
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A thoughtful write. Lovely depth of feelings. These are questions that all of us have pondered at one time or another. Good flow and tone. Well penned.
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this was sad but written so well
yes you would be missed
great work
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Very beautiful and if you ever did die...
I would cry
I would greve
and I would give anything
just to see you happy one more time
your my brother
....it's not a crime.
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Wow, think we all ask these things at some time, ours is not to know how and why but to move in peace and leave the most precious gift ever - memories. You record these questions and feelings well in great poetic take, well done -PEACE now!x
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Words all young men ask sooner are later...This woman knows your fears and question...But you do not have to worry are fear for life is precious and will always be so...Death is nothing, Its the living thats hard...You will but sleep and then awaken*hug*
I do love the way you write and the feelings that seem to just flow from your pen*hug* Thank you so much for sharing your beautiful heart with me*hug**rose**hug*
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Oh my god...that's awesome. I've had these thoughts many times also. Bravo my friend.
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Nicely written Nathan, you are a bit young to be thinking about death, leave that to the old farts like me ok? You should feel invincible at this age.
Scott
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this is a strong and powerful write with strong words which captures the reader and gets them thinking
well done bro
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My darling son, I would miss you tremendously if you died. My heart would be shattered, all else would no longer matterr, for this mother would be, lost and battered.
I love you Sweetie. I hope your well.
Did you get to see that G/f this weekend???
:)
Love,
Mom
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