Every day I awake and notice something new.
Everyday I awake and notice I know so few.
And everyday I awake and know I have to choose
To travel through life and manage not to lose.
I have to take so many decisions , some good some gray
And I have to make them day by day.
Its what we choose that creates or life
What makes us live in peace or in a strife.
We can take so many ways on our path
But in our hearts we'll always know what’s right
We'll know what will darken and what will light.
It's when we decide with our mind that we do wrong.
To decide in life is just an immortal song.
But I finally choose to live in peace
Some say it cant be done but I assure them it can.
I explain it's always been my master plan.
To choose always with love and to be alive
To control the choosing without giving a strive.
A contest entry
- November New Member Contest by AP Greeters.
600 points, ended December 7, 2007, 83 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Welcome to Allpoetry and thank you for entering
In the last line of the first stanza, it should be "lose"
The flow was direct and ran well.
Thank you for entering and good luck
Faerie
Site Greeter
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Thanks for entering and welcome to allpoetry
Nice job, good flow and structure. A nice message in this one. Good imagery. Peace is a worthy cause.
I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.
God Bless
Tammy
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Thanks for entering
The subject of this poem is good and gets one thinking. You must be careful of forcing rhyme within a poem has it can end up destroying a truly good write.
Good luck - let the ink flow and your fingers dance
Rosemary -
Welcome to All Poetry
Excellent thoughts in this! I couldn't agree more!
I really enjoyed reading this. It shows lots of strength and character.
Thanks so much for entering our contest
Gaylene
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creates or life or should be our?
in a strife? maybe just strife?
To decide in life is just an immortal song? seperate or add something here. keep writing
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Thanks for your entry :]
G'day rocio-b
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I love the beauty in this write.
The first stanza had me smiling at the knowledge that yes we do wake up everyday and seee new things and take chances, and your final stanza made me smile even more because it is your master plan to get through life happy
Wonderful
Best of luck to you in the contest
Welcome to AllPoetry
Stay safe
~Amanda
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This poem is great and meaningful. Just too many grammatical errors though.
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I think this poem is really cool. This poem is a philosophy all in itself; good work.
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