Hush little baby, now don’t you cry,
It’s time for your sweet lullaby,
Shut your eyes and shut them tight,
And to dreamland, you will take flight,
Sleep harmoniously, my little one,
Lustrous Angels will make dreams come,
And gently sing their perfect tune
As you doze under the stars and moon
The cat plays his fiddle soft and sweet,
Cherub’s caress you as you sleep,
Their wings will guard thee, we pray,
Let these words be yours today.
A contest entry
- One Whole Year by Death of the Author.
600 points, ended November 13, 2007, 49 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Sleep In Peace (Baby Picture Inspiration) by Girl With Guitar.
1100 points, ended November 24, 2007, 35 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Awww
I love it. I love the way you include so many nursery rhymes in such a simple way. I just don't know what else to say.
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i like it
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Awe... this is such sweet write. You did a great job with this.
I especially love the last stanza " the cat plays his fiddle soft and sweet cherubs caress you as you sleep ect..."
Very sweet little poem,
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That's sweet. A very good friend of mine had a baby two weeks ago. She sleeps pretty much constantly, except at night of course. Good write.
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Beautiful effort with this one. I'm not one to pick because quite frankly, I don't think I could make it sound perfect to the actual tune however some lines are off with tune. Wow my language is great today. Just something to look at is like syllables and things like that. But very well done and the message is definitly beautiful. Thank you for the entry.
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A really lovely and lyrical lullaby that was a delight to read. Keep up the wonderful works.
D.M.
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Well no doubt everyone on here will berate me for praising this poem in my contest because it is from my girlfriend! I don't care!
I think it's a great piece of work and shows how much you're improving with each new write. I'm glad you're posting more on here now
This is exceptionally sweet, a perfect lullaby. You should sing it to your children when you'rd older dear hehe
"And to dreamland,you will take flight" - that's a wonderful image.
Good use of harmoniously ^^
I also like the intertextual reference of the cat and his fiddle, it definitely adds to your poem. This has got to be your best write yet. It's just...magical. Even if you weren't my girlyfriend (*pokes*) I would like this poem just as much.
Thanks for entering and good luck
I love you x
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