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Beside You

Beneath my feet,
The softest grass,
Cared for by the most loving hands.
Around we fly,
About we chase,
To our imaginary lands.

Above the birds,
Below the rose,
As children we whisper all night.
With your strong laugh,
My quiet gasp,
We drift into the morning light.

A bed of moss,
And jasmine rain,
Lull us into the deepest sleep.
In all my dreams,
In all your hopes,
Our futures love, entwine, and leap.

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  • Kd
    September 30, 2008
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    Wonderful


  • Hidden Angel
    March 5, 2008

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    Like the rest of your work, this was simply wonderful! This was very calming and peacful and the background fits perfectly. Great job, I can't wait to read more.

    ~Hidden Angel~

  • judmc
    February 6, 2008

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    Loved it.

    A well rhymed,gentle trip to Peter Pan's dreamland,nice flow you took me on board and I enjoyed it JUDMC (George)U.K.

  • nickylast
    January 7, 2008
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    thanks yo
    means alot
    really doe


  • Lonely
    November 9, 2007

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    It was like a song.. The flow was so smooth.. and the images you create were so soothing and beautiful.. Never stop writing

    ~ Lonely

  • Hope.on.a.wire.
    November 7, 2007

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    Very delicate and soft write, with a natural flow. I really like the fact that the rhyming scheme is there and is consistent but is not the usual abab on AP. Also, the imagery is so vivid that I could experience this poem with all of my senses, and that is what makes poetry amazing, the overload of senses. Enjoyed this very much!

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