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And I've Been [Waiting So Long];;

Your Eyes [Shine Like Embers]
Your Lips [Call To Mine]
but your cold stare
makes me rethink

Cross My Heart
    [Hope To Die]
We Should be apart
    [Or I might Cry]

I have waited so long
for this magical feeling
[{I dont want it t happen with just anyone}]
                  [but its you....]]

[[Besides me]]
I ccringed at the thought of leaving
i like how you make me feel
                                          ;;[[sometimes]];;;

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  • GiftedPsychosis gold member
    November 4, 2007

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    Sometimes?
    Who?
    Why do I have so many questions?
    Will you answer me?
    Truthfully?
    Soon?
    Hopefully.

    About the poem,
    very nice job, I like it.
    The brackets are pretty cool and
    really help set the mood.
    Kind of scrambled.
    I like.


    • GlowstickOfLove
      November 4, 2007
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      lol! :]
      some guy up here >.<
      he tries to make out then i heard he called me ugly >.< [just recently]
      but yeah, he's more trouble than he's worth


  • EternitysLastWish
    November 3, 2007
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    Wow... very powerful.
    Do you know what I love about your style? The fact that you use such simplistic language in such an intricate way. It seems to sing the message more powerfully than two pages of five-syllable words! Brilliant.
    I like the way it's set out as well, the brackets make it interesting to look at as well as read.

    Well done
    ELW x