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My Lovely

Thou art more salacious than any dream

In fact, you are a deity extreme

Taunting my lust with your sensual words

Listen intently, each syllable girds

 

Taste my passion that evolves in each kiss

Tongue twisted in time, colliding in bliss

Sultry caresses upon sensual flesh

Entangled in beauty, two souls shall mesh

 

Fingers are twined within mahogany strands

Appeasing all your fantasy demands

With juices flowing in rivers of sweat

Appealing to tones of our minuet

 

 

Breathless moans escape our lips with wonder

Conjointly bursting, my heart you plunder

 

 

 

Author notes

girds ~ verb: encircles or binds
minuet ~ noun: a stately piece of music composed for dancing the minuet; often incorporated into a sonata or suite
plunder ~ verb: steal goods; take as spoils

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  • poetryality silver member
    December 4, 2007

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    Well Lil' Sis', you made me spring straight awake this morning. LOL This is very passionate and absolutely alluring. Your words are subtle but indeed erotic. You did not miss a beat with this sonnet. Not one measure of meter interrupted. The language is astute. EVERYTHING about this work is exquisite. A very pleasing work of sensuality, laced with love. I wish you well in the comp. You have gotten really good at writing these sonnets dear heart.


    Much Love Always ♥

    Renee


  • Silent Cougar Moderators member
    November 17, 2007

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    Breath taking...

    Such an exquisite piece that flows across the page melting the mind. Poetically perfect in deliverance.

    I think the content within is as soft as the image it portrays, and that pleases me.

    nothing compares to the thoughts this will enlighten in any reader. I'm glad I checked this contest out for it's importance, and more so for finding a new pleasing write.

    'well done' just seems too tame an expression, so 'Thank you' seems more appropriate.

    best of luck in the contest.


  • Kari gold member
    November 14, 2007

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    mmmm this was very totally well done sensual and soft...I love how delicate this was. It danced on the page and for sure was a turn on. Great job and the best of luck in the contest


  • Fearylynn
    November 10, 2007

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    I normally tend to shy away from erotic poetry, because it tends to just be dirty and vulgar. There's no beauty in the obscene, to me. But this is an exception- its a sensual piece, filled with emotion and imagery, but still classy.

    Good luck in the contest!


  • Poetic-Theorem gold member
    November 9, 2007

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    Lovely!!!!

    Very nice, sensual and beautiful Sonnet. Your word choice is brilliant and your poem flows with such grace and senuallity. Caught me by surprise...oh heck...I'll admit this is damn HOT as well,
    Spews first thing reading this piece.
    Need a cold shower now
    It's been awhile since we crossed paths in a contest!
    Excellent write and you are among the Best of the Best here on AP.
    I wish you the best of luck in the contest!
    Take care,
    many blessings,



    David


  • sunny day
    November 4, 2007

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    blueyez, There is steam escaping from my computer as I'm typing this for you. Very sensual and erotic, you penned this piece with just the right touch. Excellent verbiage created vivid imagery and they rhyming couplets flowed easily from the page as I read on. Thank you for sharing your gift and best wishes for you in the contest. Love and God bless, Joyce


  • Amera gold member
    November 4, 2007

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    OMG! I certainly didn't expect this. After this comment, I better take a cold shower. I love sonnets and this one is well done, hot and passionate. Sucking up to the judge was not an option but the poem is well done enough to stay in the contest. This is the second one not to be DQed. Well done!

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • Candyknife gold member
    November 3, 2007

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    ha !

    wow ! blue again im amazed !
    lol for all you simple minded folk defs. are listed
    nice well about the piece , i loved it so vibrantly written , beautifully described .i liked it a lot


  • BlissfulFireOnyx
    November 3, 2007

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    Your writting becomes more and more beautiful everyime I read it. You ought to get published sugar bear. Whom ever this is written for, ought to feel very honored and love.

    I love you

    Goddess


  • Andi. gold member
    November 3, 2007

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    O M F G! Bear!
    HOT
    HOT HOT
    HOT HOT!
    Well done on another amazing write!
    ♥ Dani

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