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A Thing Called Love

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Choking on an endless teardrop

Puncture wounds saturate my bleeding chest

Raped by the harsh realities of false faith

Where dreams fade into acidious cries

Eating away at my semi existence

 

Pleas echo off pale heartless walls

Oppressive drops of agony

Fill each myth of every torn wing

Where twisted tongues scream in silence

 

For why would a soul long to be resurrected

Laying in a puddle of pain

Death takes its toll, like four seasons of rain

And my last words weep through hollow eyes

Trying to reach a piece of paradise  

 

Betraying lips feed off of the faithful

As they create the chaos in this infested world

Each lie of I love you, I die anew

An empty pit should never be filled with tainted tears 

But then again, who cares for the lonely...

 

Into a drifting stream of dying dreams

I realized I never fell from any height

For I have never stood tall enough to be noticed

By the only thing I thought mattered

Lost on a dead end street, a thing called love

 

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  • CherylAnn
    December 2, 2007

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    Oh Timothy my heart is ripped into pieces with this pen.The sadness is so overwhelming and brings out a light on the reality of love...As love doesn't seem to last these days.I will hold you in my prayers if that helps your heart any...They say time heals all wounds...we must wait to see...That hard part is getting past it all...
    My heart bleeds for your hurt hun
    Blessings Hun
    ~Cheryl~

    I am here if you ever need to talk sweetie


  • Freelance writer
    November 20, 2007

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    Very nice

    Your bleeding heart talks in your poem depicting a vivid picture. No love is invain if it does not ask any return. My friend, may you succeed in your endeavour!


  • Tam
    November 18, 2007

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    oh my goodness...

    this is an excellent write...
    very vivid and powerful...I could bawl...
    you have some KILLER lines in this poem I wish I had penned...LOL
    well done, sir!
    I do pray this is a fiction only poem...for that street is indeed painful.
    Blessings! Tammy

  • A floatingleaf silver member
    November 16, 2007
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    Such a sad piece but so well written...I salute you...Leaf


  • PerfectImperfection
    November 14, 2007

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    OMG! When did you start writing the angsty side of things??? This was so very well expressed, and painfully penned. Seems almost like my heart leaking words onto your parchment... Beautiful in all its saddened glory. I adored this dear brother!!!


  • penman gold member
    November 14, 2007
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    Excellent

    Very deep and powerful poem. So much sadness, rippling through the verses.


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    November 14, 2007

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    What a sad and emotional piece. I think we have all been here in the place you described. How the heart and soul longs for the love that may or may not be destined for them.
    This was written beautifully...
    Soulful Woman


  • Blue Rew silver member
    November 12, 2007

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    The painful side of love...
    admitting such grief in matters of the heart can
    be the most hurtful of all. There is so much in here that relates vividly to the harsh reality of a soul shunned by love; but I absolutely felt "like four seasons of rain". As rain to me is nature's tears; sometimes shed in joy, but mostly in sorrow. And this relating of pain to elements captivated me. Blue


  • Lonely
    November 8, 2007

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    Each and every line of this poem is filled with emotions.. Really liked the way you concluded it.. and the line "eating away at my semi existence" Broken by love - and heartache.. perfectly portrayed
    Keep writing

    ~ Lonely


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    November 5, 2007

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    This reached inside and pulled the tears from my heart...This is amazing my sweet Pet!...If I didn't know this was just a poem I would be heart broken!...You are one master Poet!

    Purrrrs to her pet*hug**rose**hug*


  • Stardust-luvr
    November 4, 2007

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    My dearest sweetheart I finally stopped crying after about an hour - long enough to hopefully write this out. As I have said so often it probably sounds like a cd stuck on repeat but : I love you so very much my dear friend and bro I hate that you're hurting that I want to hold you in my arms forever and a day enveloping your soul and join it with mine if had to and take every bit of the anguish all away to see your beacon of everlasting life shine again. I love you and I will be by your side if not in person, in spirit, when the light shines renewed xoxoxooxoxoxoxoxoxoxooxo


  • 245Trioxin
    November 3, 2007

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    Pang! Pang! ...you're dead....

    Not many people know the meaning of that word, but you & I do.

    "four seasons of rain" G-D I frigging love that...one of those lines I wish I had written. For when the rain first falls, it's cool, refreshing, purifying, but when it doesn't stop...it saturates and causes your flesh to seperate, it's an unbareable heaviness. Waterlogged...your drowning heart.

    That one line is a poem in itself and a bit of genius from one hurting soul to another.

    We are just pawns in someone elses little black book.

    How about a rhombus stabbed in the back, that should give you a triangle or two eh?


  • irene plunkett
    November 3, 2007
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    brilliant piece of work my dear friend. hope u r well from irene


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    November 3, 2007

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    hey this is a really worrying and emotiona write and clearly states that you have been through alot
    been wondering where you went and if you was ok
    i am here if you ever just need someone to talk to


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    November 3, 2007

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    Well My darling half of my soul....
    I can see you have been through soemthing. Have missed you my friend. Been worried sick. Although i hear not my phone ringing or a simple message I wait. But as long as I see your writing, i know your around. This piece has me in tears as you should know it would have for your my dear friend and when you pain so do i.
    Please get in touch i am deeply concerned.

    Your forever friend, the second half of your soul.
    until i hear from you

    Tory


  • Swan song gold member
    November 3, 2007

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    Oh man! break out the aniti depressents and ring up the shrink! This poem overflowed with pain. But by golly it your gonna be in pain make a great poem on pain and you did that!


  • Jalalbad gold member
    November 3, 2007

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    where twisted tongues scream in silence. This line made me smile. The poem is heartbreaking enough to make one cry, yet I am still smiling about twisted tongues.
    Smile,
    Judy


  • Rose Angel gold member
    November 3, 2007

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    Knowing there was a contest called "Shattered" I see it is not any entry in that contest, so grieve for you if thie is a reality in your experience! Oh for love that lasts, trusts, and forever gets closer in unity as one soul, and one heart! I pray it is not so, Tim..You cared for others, and you cared for her so much, and we care for you, if this is the case. Dear Tim take comfort in our caring for you, and her, but especially for you who unselfishly kept giving and encouraging us all that you knew that we love you and care about you so.May things mend, and resume again, restored, which means even better than the beginning! Moving write!


  • Katie Lazette
    November 3, 2007

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    Very sad Tim. I hope this isn't something you are experiencing. Wonderful write even with it's sadness.


  • EeyoreUK
    November 3, 2007

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    my goodness, how terribly upsetting and emotional this sounds. nonetheless it is well penned. Remember I am always here should you need to talk. Your friend from over the pond Eeyore.


  • Arizona Sunset
    November 3, 2007

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    awwwwwwww this is so sad. Hope this isn't real for you right now. Excellent write, and I delighted in reading this ~blessings to you always~

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