So beautiful is love, like a rose.
So sweet the thoughts that love propose.
Appealing to most, if not all,
for its powerful lure we fall.
Yet you must beware of its beauty, its charm,
because the thorns can bring you harm.
Grasp carefully you must to avoid the pain,
so much to lose, so much to gain.
Once it’s obtained, for it you must care.
If health maintained, its blessings you will share.
If not tended, watered, it surely will wilt,
as will love, if tainted by lies and guilt.
But oh the happiness it will bring,
for true love found makes the heart sing.
Forever treasured, it will long last,
as preserved within enchanted glass.
Respect its strength yet fragility,
and it will bring enduring ecstasy,
then never will a petal fall,
for love is powerful and conquers all.
Author notes
compare love to a rose option
A contest entry
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WOW! One of the best comparison's I've read so far. Brilliantly done and i enjoyed reading it. Keep writing
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very beautifully written...
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Indeed, love is like a rose. Like they say, it's beautiful, but if you break her, be careful for the thorns. That describes me, too.
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this is beautiful I like this I enjoyed reading thisand it has a very pleasing rhyme
very smooth 
thanks for sharing a heart warming poem I love this good luck in the contest
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this has a very pleasing rhyme it's smooth
thank you for entering this uplifting piece and best of luck
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The images in the piece were beautiful I enjoyed reading it and the metaphore awesome great job!
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This piece is a beautifully written
"Flower's Story", Dear Poet.
Be proud of your work.
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This is wonderful. I just love romatic poems like these. The rhyming you have done here is great which make the poem even more amazing. Rhyming love poems seem to better the free verse poems to me for some reason.
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I love the Beauty and the Beast reference to enchanted glass keeps the rose Beautiful write on such a strong subject. Thank you for entering
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Just a brief and polite note to tell you that "L'amour est Comme a Monté" is total nonsense in French (literally it might be translated as "Love is like has ascended") and does certainly not mean "Love is Like a Rose". If you wish to have a correct translation please contact me.
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lovely
very inspirational write . . good use of vocabulary .. like "for its powerful lure we fall" and "for love is powerful and conquers all" . . good luck in the contest !!
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I really like your poetry, you've entered my contests before and I have liked each one I have read. You have a beautiful style that just draws me in. This is one of my favourites in the contest so far. It is a very different take on love, although it contains over-used ideas (not surprising, as you say, everyone falls under loves spell), you have said it in a unique and new way.
Grasp carefully you must to avoid the pain,
so much to lose, so much to gain.
Those lines are wonderful because they are so true. I think, no matter what relationship there is always going to be pain even if you are as careful as possible. So much to lose, so much to gain <-- perfect.
The third stanza is also very good and...well spot on again. Tainted love will wilt indeed.
The only thing I would change is fragileness which seems clumbsy, to fragility. Then happiness could be ecstasy too so you could have
Respect its strength yet fragility
and it will bring enduring ecstasy
To me that works better, but only change it if it works better for you too.
The last couplet is...again perfect. I loved this poem. I say that a lot on here (mainly because I can't criticise) but this time I genuinely mean it. Thanks for sharing this great piece, it has been a pleasure to read. Good luck and take care xx
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thanks for your lovely comment and your helpful suggestions! i'm always happy to receive contructive criticism!
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Hehe no problem
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very nice!!! i can tell you put work into this piece!! great job and good luck!
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