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Annihilation

Incandescent contradictions scatter the autumnal floor
as thoughts stagnate, half valued, half purged
Devoid of all sense.
All happiness as transient as lost kisses
Penetration as inconceivable as survival
No words come but remains a nauseating fear of a litany
The chill that crept over her skin has decided to stay
The letter comes easily
the image of her naked, mutilated body on the shower room floor
How long would it take?
Jukebox classics. Faintly varied.
I don’t know why you say hello;
I say goodbye

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Written October 16th, 2003

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  • ArtFullyMe gold member
    December 23, 2003
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    These words are strong..and visual..the sense they seem to give is that of complete... destruction of the self...not sure why, but it seems to be laying out the seconds before....nothing.

    ~~whims


  • poisonsilver
    October 21, 2003
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    YEs, this IS a powerful poem!.... i wish people would not use nature in comparrasen to bad things! nature is a good force and dose not harm.... at least she harms no more then you harm her.... but, i guess you have to be a witch to understand anything about our mother earth... over all i enjoyed this poem.... i find the words nicly used and you flow with in his form well. awesome work and i hope you are not TOOO offened by my comments

  • legendair
    October 20, 2003
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    My Darling Jo, where is the world when this is how you feel? Why is the beautiful transformation to Autumn not reminding you that all seasons change and he will be with you again. This poem brings tears and is so powerful but not as powerful as the light within you or the magnitude of your love. Dont let the blues defeat you. let love lift you, and read Paulo Coelho's the Alchemist, quick. Love never ending RXXXX

  • donthideintheshade
    October 18, 2003
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    No mutilated bodies please Jo Jo. This is an amazing piece, lots of big words make little Jo sound all brainy...(which she is). And.....I actually understand them!! Wooo!
    I have been very controlled on the mutilating front, go me. I wont see that again! Especially now Lindy is falling in love with a real boy! A nice one who loves me back!
    Anyway, great piece..............Lindy.. xxxxxx

    (Did I tell you I slept with Ben U.......did you even ever work with him?!?! I forget.........) Mwah x