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Mayhem

Give me the last potion
Don't tell it will kill you

Curse me with the last spell
I can't get the magic over you

Bury me, dear dragon, so alive
So I greet the great dead magicians

Throw this magic wand out
I won't be good again, using it

Yet leave me my spooky hat
It'll help me die safe and sound.

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  • No Quarter
    July 10

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    i took a look at the picture, good take on it.
    "Curse me with the last spell
    I can't get the magic over you

    Bury me, dear dragon, so alive
    So I greet the great dead magicians"
    my favorite part. great job with this piece. thankis for entering and good luck.


  • honey bear
    January 29

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    i found this to be a very strange write and yet i was compelled to read it again and again, i wouldnt have put this down as an exelent write on first read as it kinda went a bit *over the head* but then i re read and loved it, amazing, weird and a compeling write very good work.


    • Hebz
      January 31
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      Thnx alot, I really appreciate your comment, & It's been agaes that I logged on here, & I was very happy to find a comment from you, Coz you're the first person I knew here, & You still support me , Thnx alot *hugs*

  • Bob Fox
    October 4, 2008

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    The mind

    Oh the games the mind can play on us. Cause to wonder and cry anf for some that wish , to even die. Mayhem ? Oh yes poet.

  • Tempa Lee
    May 3, 2008

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    hey this is Dani...the judge of the contest. just to let you know that i do not know who you are...so if you know me please don't be upset if i leave you a comment that does not make you smile. it's just i'm judging this contest and i wanna be able to seek out the good and get rid of the bad. i guess i should have seen the picture from the other contest you enter this poem in because i really did not get it. not saying it was bad but it could of been more better than this. but i wish you the best of luck in this contest.



    ~Dani~


  • Silvos. silver member
    May 1, 2008

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    I really enjoyed reading this, you are very talented. Good luck in the contest hosted by known2balone223.

    Keep writing,
    Silvos.


  • ForeverLastingComa
    April 28, 2008

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    wow this poem screamed at me!...awsome write! i especially loved these lines

    "Give me the last potion
    Don't tell it will kill you

    Curse me with the last spell
    I can't get the magic over you"

    Awsome write! Good Luck in the Contest =)


  • grannyeri gold member
    March 14, 2008

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    YEs, these words do certainly describe the picture prompt you chose to enter in this contest. COngratulations on the HM for this poem.


  • Riftkin gold member
    November 2, 2007
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    nice take on this picture
    thank you for entering

    Riftkin

    • Hebz
      November 3, 2007
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      Thnx alot for comment & the HM

      When I stopped writing & I thought I can't write & I won this HM...I felt totally flying in the wide space...

      Thnx again, U made me take the decision of trying to write again...




      GloriousGift
      Heba

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