Memories of past love comes to my eyes
Images of past joy and happiness appear
The feeling I once had came and slowly dies
My love my heart has been filled with sorrow and fear
Consumed with nothing but anger and lies
My screams in pain and torment you'll never hear
I gave a rose to you as a gift from my heart
A gift of love that helped you have so many dreams
Dreams of joy and thoughts of us never being apart
The day we kissed I knew exactly what our love means
Our hearts were joined together but we couldn't start
We couldn't start what we wanted most because of fiends
We wanted to start a family but troubles got in the way
Pain in the heart and pain in the mind was all we had
We still felt joy for one another and we decided to stay
As days go by our sorrow and pain drove us mad
We helped each other and shared our pain each day
Even though friends were happy we grew sad
We grew sad to the point where we couldn't help it
We couldn't heal our pain or fix the scars
Emotional scars that slowly bind us to forget
Forgetting the rain clouds that had covered the stars
The day she left I can remember for my heart had split
Split in two and finally understood what is a true scar
It rained the day she left for I and the heavens cried
But I must respect and honor the path she had chose
She brought hope to my heart even though I had died
Her last gift to me that was later covered in my blood a rose
Author notes
EternalPyre "Christopher A. Pritchard"
A contest entry
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Comments
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This is very sad. I loved that line about how you and the heavens cried because I've felt like that. thnks for entering.
...Simply Me♥ -
Quote so I can put you in the prelim-list
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This peice I had to reread a time or two to catch your flow but the meaning in the words is all the same, strong and emotional
My Favorite Part
Memories of past love comes to my eyes
Images of past joy and happiness appear
The feeling I once had came and slowly dies
My love my heart has been filled with sorrow and fear
I Love those 4 lines and they flowed easiest for me in the whole write.
a few of the word tenses I would have rethought but thats me and yours worked fine
Good Luck in my contest
~Katie AKA Lyrikz~ -
very good
i like this poem it is really nice.how did you feel when you were writeing this.this whole poem is my fav
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