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My Angel (do you wish to paint?)

beads of black cascade your back bearing cross below


          my angel did you know


your face is hidden from me

yet you view your wings I see


my angel do you long to fly away from ugly mankind’s high

horse of holy bleeding taint


          my angel do you wish to paint


escape with feathered compass go

          peace my angel meet Van Gogh

                    peace my angel may you know
















 

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  • Improv Machinery
    January 3, 2008
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    i like the flow of this piece but i know that i am going to have to read this one a few more times until it actually sinks in. i can see something in it but i cant figure it out yet. just know that i like this piece a lot. thanks ering and good luck in the contest
    Rob


  • Puppydog gold member
    November 3, 2007

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    BEAUTIFUL!!!!!

    Oh my! Some of our most wonderfu artist did their best work when their emotions were sad and depressed.


  • Malabu
    November 3, 2007

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    what a lovely poem

    supple words for wishes to fly....certainly a different view of my thoughts...and from the air...the world is beautiful...a painted picture we all should see...love the supple rhyme too..congratulations tam
    Mal


  • tara wilson gold member
    November 3, 2007

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    Congrats, on another exceptional piece of poetry, so worthy of gold in its brilliance, Love this!


  • mysticstorm gold member
    November 2, 2007

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    This is beautiful! Love the wonderful soft flow, yet deep harsh meaning. Well done.

    So very strong and meaningful, full of wonderful lines.

    Very well done!
    Excellent take on picture, so creative and unique.

    Thank you for entering!

  • Rowan gold member
    November 2, 2007

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    I loved this piece, this was fabulously done.
    I love the line
    " my angel do you wish to paint"
    so delicately done in only ten lines.


  • sheltered
    November 2, 2007

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    Now this is way outside the box.
    Seems more mysterious and abstract
    without the picture's consideration.

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