Bang! You’re dead
Bang! The sound most people attribute to me…
Bang! They said he died, now his soul is free….
Bang, bang, bang!…the weapons of the cowards n’fools.
Bang! Bang! , necessary for use as a policeman’s tool.
Bang , bang how much longer will that sound ring?
Bang!, bang!, feeling like a man with this powerful thing!
Bang, bang she made everyone cry,with that sad song she sang.
Bang, bang what I’m used for , I don’t choose, people abuse
Bang bang they all dead, make a positive change, before we all lose.
A contest entry
- Who can Object by Legend.
1800 points, ended November 15, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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"feeling like a man with this powerful thing!"- I liked this line the best because its so unfortunetly true, this was an interesting piece and I felt a lot of emotion behind it, great job!
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Thank you!
my homegirl is in hizz-ouse!! Appreciate the kind words!
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The repetition make it strong piece..very intersting write my sweet friend..I enjoyed it..thank you for sharing
Amarige
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thanks!
always nice to know you approve!
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you banged this one out
So much for your bang!bang...mac
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Thanks
for your banging comment! l.o.l.!
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I like the repetition of the onomatopoeia, Bang!
Very concise, no abstract nonsense here, good job!
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Thank you
appreciate the kind words!
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It is a sad state of affairs with this is the sound of the norm. You have brilliantly penned the need for change in simple sight and sound. Well done. ~Pamela
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THANK YOU
I am happy you
like it, your words were very kind.
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I like your poems they make me smile thanks!
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Thank you!
I appreciate the kindness very much!
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I have just watched on the news
the lunatic shooting in Finland. Bang! Bang! You're dead! This is no game. Even in Australia, the guns on the blackmarket seem to be on the increase although life is a little safer here.
Thank you for your poem of statement.
Lyndon.
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Thanks!
Yes, it really is a sad thing that though the gun itself can't think, the idiots using it
decide they are givers and takers of life! Thanks again for reading.
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Very wise words and well written, great flow!. Well done and good luck.
Shaz xx
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thanks!
very kind words and I wish you the same!
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You've given the gun, an inanimate object, a loud, powerful voice. what a great take just on one word as a prompt. Good Luck with this. Von
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thank you!
I really appreciate the nice comment, and I will be checking in on your work soon!
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I am assuming the song was by Cher? a wonderful song by a favourite artist. A poem that has so much relevance in todays world Seems the rule of the gun wins every argument.Sadly i see no end to it. It is to ingrained into the way of life A excellent write Good luck in the contest
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Thank You!
I honestly wasn't aware Cher put out a song with that subject matter; so u just taught me something! thank u! my friend, AS A BOOKEND TO CLOSE THIS COMMENT, I hate guns.
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All I hear is gunshots! All i see is negativity! I love the imagery created by the repetive "Bang". good luck in the contest.
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thank you
always happy to hear from you big guy!
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