Im trying to find myself in the midst of all these thoughts
My head throbbing and humming from the pressure
Continuously thinking
Continuously seeing
Continuously realizing the hopelessness of life
I contemplate on past events failed or muffed
I think about the fun times I had
I think about all the small things in life that made me smile
I then take a look at myself as a person
I see a fool blinded by everyday bliss and the good times in life
The silence of sorrow finds a home in my thoughts as depression sinks farther and farther in
How can I keep going I ask myself
How many lives can I continue to destroy
When will this tragedy end
A tragedy known as life
Everyone has it
A tragedy
Accept it
Deny it
Its still there
Just because you decide to push it away doesnt make it any less there
Being blind to the failure of you life
The end draws near
As you sit and think
The electrons fire off in your brain and you stumble
You stumble over the fear of imperfection
What others see of you haunts the self embodiement of your being
You falter and fail to continue
Thats it
The end
Thats life.....
A contest entry
- Inspire me! by reinhardt-napoleon.
300 points, ended February 3, 2008, 21 entries
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Please tell me what you think
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very dark, very sad...I'm so sorry you've tasted that kind of despair.
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This Is Beautiful. Life Is A tradgedy But It's Beautiful. And I Think It's Defintely worth It. as Are Most Tradgedies. Better That It Happens And ends Then It Never Happens At All.
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That's life - how often do we here this these days. So much that we can change, so much that we can learn from so we do not make the same mistakes again. Liked the sentiments expressed so well in these lines; easy to read and understand. Think that the I's should be capitalized though, to be correct, and the contractions should have an apostrophe - I'm, that's, It's, etc. Check spelling of lives - has double l. Think when these are edited, this will be a great poem. Keep writing.
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Great job, I liked it.
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I really like this. It's really inspirational! I have a lot of the same thoughts that you added in your poem. YOu have a relly good piece and i see that you've added it in too a few contest... adn I wish you good luck in those.
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Ther is a lot of emotion in this piece and it is well written. Nice job with this and it was well done. Good luck n the contest.
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The emotion is strong in this piece. I like the inner turmoil, acceptance and conviction to resolve it as well. Good luck to you and a great job on this.
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i love it
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The emotion in this poem is keen. I think it's truely amazing!
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I love this poem and I can relate to it. It's great
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