My friend
I will not lie
we are
confused inside
People's opinions
rack our mind
you show yourself
and I will hide
years ago
i was killed
drained of love
no fuel to live
They try to understand us
they want to know
but how can they
if I'm not whole
I'm drug through life
an empty shell
but now that life is awakened
it feels like hell
Burning flames
lick my heart
better to burn
than be ripped apart
But, we are apart
because I am gone
I have been stolen away
by those who do you wrong
I am within you
apart of your soul
but they murdered me
and without knowledge
of their thoughtless strife
they have caused us
to take our own life
In a list
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this poem is really good. a greeat emo poem!!!
good luck x
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Kudos to you on a great poem....
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Brillinat write it sent a shiver rite down my spine!!! bravo love it! gud imagery and rhyming went well! x
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this sounds like the cry of every exasperated teenager. You capture the frustration of being far away from the adult world and not being able to connect extremely well...the flow is great and the choice of words effective. You've got a great piece here!
Good luck
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I like it, the rhyme was good, some of your grammer and spelling was a little off, that will be important in the next round, not so much in this round... But otherwise it was a really good poem...
Thanks heaps for entering and good luck! =)
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excellent poem! Really! Going the finalist section
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Its good... It really is... But its sad. I dont want you to be sad anymore.
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Powerful write!
I especially like the lines
They try to understand us
they want to know
but how can they
if im not whole
So sad.
Good luck in the contest!
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this is really good. i like it.
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Very impressive...I really like the flow of this poem...
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awesome poem! really, it's awesome. Good luck in the contest!!
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