Now that no carousel surrounds me,
and there is none to disagree,
am I become too centered
on this island now absurd,
that it only tempts catastrophe?
Was the music in my mind so sweet,
that no longer do I dare compete,
to hang like a gallows bird
in fear of uttering any word
that puts me in the judgement seat?
I designed a place so sacrosanct
that I fear not one idea I plant,
will come to be matured,
or even literatured;
having suffered myself a syncophant.
Now I long for that peerless circus,
to power my muse through impetus,
then lay upon that brochure
my retired signature,
and not fear the deed to dangerous.
A contest entry
- November New Member Contest by AP Greeters.
600 points, ended December 7, 2007, 83 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Welcome to Allpoetry and thank you for entering
Excellent flow through choice of words. The grammar is well done, and I feel as though this was just a tongue twister of thoughts.
Thank you for entering and good luck
Faerie
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Thanks for entering and welcome to allpoetry
Interesting poem. I really didn't get much from it but nice word choice. Nice formating and flow.
I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.
God Bless
Tammy
Site Greeter
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I really like the images in this poem as well as the way you've chosen your vocabulary. The flow is quite good. Good luck in the contest.
~Diana
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Good Work
Good work and keep on writing! -
Thanks for entering
This is well written with a good fluid flow. The imagery is interesting and the word usage is powerful.
Truly a joy to read.
Good luck - let the ink flow and your fingers dance
Rosemary -
Ok this one is great. Keep up the writes
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WOW! This is really a very interesting piece. I can see why Asfand was so very inspired by this piece. It is awesome. your wording is nicely selected, and wonderfully displayed. I wish you the best in this contest, and in all that you do.
Keep it up... and never let your ink run dry!!
Welcome to this wonderful community, and I just know you will meet some very talented people!!
Melanie
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Hi and welcome to AP.
I'm another judge in the Poetic Challenge, and wanted to let you know I think you've penned a very deep and thoughtful poem here. I can see why Asfand found inspiration in this piece!
I hope you enjoy your time here, and good luck in the new members contest.
Best wishes,
~J.
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Welcome to AP ~
I am one of the Judges for Poetic Challenge, and Asfand has just penned a poem from being influenced by your poem ~
Nice Theme....great Flow.....punctuation is a weeee bit off here & there, but does not obstruct your thoughts ~
Besdies the 3rd line..*am*...I think this is a good entry into this contest ~
Good luck, and nice to meet you,
Bear ~
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Hi, I am currently involved in the Poetic Challenge's Season 5, Round II is about searching new author's work to inpire your own work.
I searched alot, and finally came to this poem. Here is the poem that was sparked by this wonderful piece.
http://allpoetry.com/poem/show/3586714
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Oh wow ~ This is indeed a stunning piece, absolutely wonderful with imagery tossed here and there. Very beautiful penning!!
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Thanks for your entry :]
G'day hcscable ♥
"to hang like a gallows bird
in fear of uttering any word"
These two lines seem to be stuck in my head now. I enjoyed this in-depth poem you have penned.
Very emotional and strong.
Best of luck to you in the contest
Welcome to AllPoetry
Stay safe
~Amanda
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Wow I think this is quite stunning! The choices that you have made sound like ones you haven't been so happy with(if this is true)
Great imagery and wording throughout this. Thansk so much for entering our contest
gaylene
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