giving out the warmth
during cool seasons
a certain romance
with the rug in front
and feet placed warmly on top
a cat snugly on top
eyeing the fishbowl
waiting to prance
with perfect precision
but it also feels scarey
like a force inside
controlling it
anytime the fire can go
with no reasonable explanation
a chimney-sweep might fall down
with soot covering his face
and all his clothes
what a funny sight that would be
even Santa Clause might appear!
what a weird invention
with so many feelings
no one can be sure
of the magic behind
the fireplace
Author notes
describing a fireplace~
A contest entry
- Who can Object by Legend.
1800 points, ended November 15, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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very well described.. wanting us to go there
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charming idea
you civered about all of the bases for a container that holds fire....mac
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This was wonderful, excellect imagery-great job
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What a lovely write, I can relate to your words and there's always a cat laid in front of my fireplace too lol. Well done and good luck in the contest.
Shaz xx
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Keep your home fire burning
because you get so much snug comfort from it which you convey very well. I like your poem in its exploratory passage. Do write like this often!
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This is nice. I like the way you describe fire as having a spirit. This also made me think fond thoughts of childhood.
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Your poem envokes so many happy memories for me - I don't have a fireplace any more but i'm drawn as a moth to a flame when i see one, glowing and welcoming. Good Luck with this, Von
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You have painted a wonderful image with your words.There is a magic that hid within a fire and the fireplace only magnifies it. It is always the focal point in any home An enjoyable read Good luck in the contest
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nice little write
I like it when I read something light and easy! thanks for the interesting piece!
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a peaceful picture...
...but it does have its own question to wonder about, and then it becomes scarey.
I saw the cat on top of the rug.
I like the way you paint a picture and then pose a twist within it. I like your alliteration and the way you have line breaks to add to the meaning of your free verse.
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great atmosphere
however did not understand the location of the cat
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