Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read • Contests • Groups • Learn • Forums • Store • Help
 

Souls

My heart leaps as he comes down the path
A path from which no one can pass
Or they will fear the wrath
That only death forecasts

He walks only thinking of seeing me
And helping me through the dreary darkness of the night
Since I cannot see past the debris
Of the long forgotten fight

As I wait the moon shines bright
Over are heads and in our eyes
For our souls will reunite
Slowly expressing our long goodbye's

Hoping to live together forever
Under the moons loving embrace
No matter what endeavor
That is hidden in this dismal place

For our love can never be destroyed by the mere hand of men
They do not posses the power
And they will not be able to try again
During this unforeseen hour

Their eyes can only see their hatred and deceit
Hearts broken beyond repair
And they cannot defeat
What is not really there?

Now after many hours he has come safely to me
And now we leave to a place of peace
Our souls together after all that has passed
A place where we can find a true release

Author notes

I wrote this with some help from my friends Eryn and Cursha.

Contest-Sweet--Fire--Roses
, one liner-To find love we have to escape from hate.

A contest entry

Random poem, plz tell me how i did.

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    • Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments

1 - 9 of 9
  • piccola silver member
    April 11, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    Very interesting write. More than one person had a hand in the writing but still it is smooth. In one or two places, like the last stanza it seems kind of different. The rhythm changes. Still, it's good. Thank you for entering.


  • Ms Raneika
    March 18, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    It is as if one person helped the poem flow as nicely as I read it ...I thank you again for entering!

    Love, Raneika


  • TheAshtrayGirl
    January 28, 2008

    Edit | Reply

    :)

    Excellent
    Great job
    You and your friends are very talented

    Thanks for entering my contest
    &
    Goodluck

    Jaz <3


  • Lj-
    November 29, 2007
    Edit | Reply

    Good thoughts, but as a whole, trite.

    Thank you for your entry,
    Best of luck.



  • NyteShade
    November 6, 2007
    Edit | Reply
    Beautiful write here Midnight, you and your friends did a great job. Love the flow of this piece.

1 - 9 of 9