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blackened dreams..

Before

I’m found

slowly gliding in

these

gardens of

sensual yet unseen

spirits..

towering

the

skies

like free

flowing

tides of rivers

of

peace,

harmony I seek..

I shall lay bare

on

this bed

of thorny roses,

blackened by

darker times

..hoping the

pains I wish to discard

will untangle

and catch flight again..

so I can

slowly glide in

these

gardens with

sensual yet unseen

spirits

allowing me

to be free..

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something i'm trying to make sense of..

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  • shellybabz
    July 2, 2008

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    amazingly shorttt and yettt uncoveringg a thousand truthss.. i love it...damnn how do u think so far lezzy!!! INorder to be found you have to be free is the wayy i see it,,, and your first line reveals that truth "Before I’m found"
    and the 'garden' - probably the garden of eden?? well the way i see it is that the sin in this garden imprisoned all humanbeings, because we are all born with sin,, i luvvv itttt

  • blueyez
    January 25, 2008

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    this is a beautiful write! Wow!!! I love the font you chose as it goes perfectly with the words and feel of this poem!

    peace and love

  • sexieblacc
    November 19, 2007

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    Oh My......oh..there it is. internal bliss from reading your words. They inspire me to keep writing and learning my talents. Kudos Mr. Poet.


  • cgirl0410
    November 2, 2007

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    BEAUTIFUL!!!!!!!!!!!! Wow, this was DEEP, Blac! I love this piece. It's almost haunting, you know. Like you said, something you're trying to figure out. Something that won't go away. Deja Vu, but you can't remember when you saw it last. - cgirl0410


  • MahoganyFlow
    November 2, 2007

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    Your words draw your audience in. I loved the imagery you created. This was soft and it flowed beautifully. Keep Writing!

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