The flaming flight will soon arise
through summer days, pass winter dawns
with gold and orange and red ablaze.
The falling feathers shall soon raise
a life of fire compasion desire.
The one blessed with sweet flaming wings
sings a song that surpasses heaven's.
It melds broken hearts with graceful tears,
flowing rain through slow burning years.
A simple gift from that which only sweetly flames.
The flaming embers shall faintly fall
upon the cold and weary ground,
and left the world to freeze in ice
as it rained the tears of sacrifice
for angels are reborn again, from the ash and coals.
A contest entry
- HELP ME by andie11.
300 points, ended December 13, 2007, 8 entries
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hm...well, what do think really, an honest opinion of what you think of the poem and what you think it means.
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It's very good. In my opinion very deep as well. Using all the details of a phoenix to describe something more beautiful than an angel. Again very nice poem. ^^
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WOW!!! Imagery galore!!!!!I am ranting about this awesome poem!!! WhoooooHooooo! Keep writing!!!!
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Now for my honest opinion:
Some of it is cliched. The ending is kind of weak. But I must say, very interesting poem!
Vivien
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Thank you for entering my contest
The imagery was in parts good, but in others, terribly cliched. A couple of grammatical errors also,
the poem i didn't really get, the last stanza comes out of nowhere and doesn't really tie in with the rest of the poem. Plus, what is this saying? It certainly isn't the first about a pheonix and wont be the last.
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beautiful
thanks for your entry -
Hmm... another honest opinion wanting person. Well if you want my opinion (which maybe you do, and maybe you don't) I liked this. Of course I am one of those people who likes just about everything. Either way, this poem really spoke to me (figuratively speaking of course. otherwise I would need to be insitutionalized) and it make me smile. Awesomeness.
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Beautiful language and graceful imagery. very well written, a thoroughly enjoyable piece. best wishes to you poet.
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