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The Plantagenets I

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Eleanor's Story I



Prelude

Tis cold here this time of year
and the walls in Fontevrault contain me
my veil, this labored life now......

I return to the time, when the courtship
of us began, to the time of the Troubadour
minstrels and the crusades.
I am the lioness, the prowling cat
the Queen of this lair, I now lay to die
and yet Henry, remembrance of us, is not bitter,

but a history waiting to be told.
Our lives, our love, the wars, the arguments
banishment and betrayals,

shall weep from this nib and ink out in truths.
In verse of Latin or Poitevin, I shall regale
how we courtly loved and yet married we were,

"without the pomp or ceremony that befitted our ranks".

The courtship began
with promise of wealth
from my fortune,
a dowry worth gold and a fertile
woman, an amazonian warrior.






Henry's Story I



Prelude

My words, the scourge of
those who fawn after me.
King I must, God I cannot be.
Oh, Thomas, all dead, but you
my Eleanor, my dear
I recount now, with jocular humor
how we became coupled,
King & Queen
of England and acquired lands.

This tale of courtship and wealth
I fall to the heartland of Anjou,
to the throne of my voracious empire
that soured you to me.
Fifteen years of your House Arrest
have narrowed my eyes,
my soul now weakened, my agility disfigured
befallen my reddish mane with graying tears.
I shall now tell the sorry souls,

minstrels and strolling players of our fate
troubadours sang of our love,
and our failings, now left in the disquiet of time.
I go back, back to when my warrior queen shone
within shadows of my philandering.
How through my betrayals, you rose up,
fastened our sons to your hip and belly
and fought me like a Lion in Winter.


You were my Queen,
my beloved, in the year 1152
in Bordeaux,
I wed you and therein lies the story
of the Plantagenets,

of us, Eleanor.



 

 

 




 

Author notes

First of a series of pieces on Henry II and Eleanor of Aquitaine

Image is of Katherine Hepburn and Peter O'Toole from the film Lion in Winter........

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  • tinuelena
    November 10, 2007
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    hey... my forebears! <3

    I loved this.


  • Grunts Girl silver member
    November 4, 2007

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    i could have sworn i commented on this.. but maybe i read it at work and then had to go real quick...
    hmmmm...

    now this is medival... that i like
    this is done so well


  • DogFish silver member
    November 2, 2007
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    Drama!

    What summits you both are reaching for...and have attained!


  • J.J. Sass
    November 2, 2007

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    Oh! I'm so happy you sent me this link G. This is love at its finest, with the bruises and the spirit threatened by such batterings yet a woman, strong as this,

    'fastened our sons to your hip and belly
    and fought me like a Lion in Winter.'

    That line stood out among the rest. Wonderful stuff, and excellently penned by you both.

    Best wishes in the contest,
    Stacy

  • Rowan gold member
    November 2, 2007

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    wow~ is all I can say. A medieval love story that continues, is there anything you can't write about? Such a duet~ positively brillant.


    • NurseChilly gold member
      November 2, 2007
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      thank you Kathleen

      ..... we hope to carry this tale on for a bit yet..........


  • AJ Morelli gold member
    November 2, 2007
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    wow Gill this is great, you write this genre so well...


    al


    • NurseChilly gold member
      November 2, 2007
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      Thanks Al.... Tireseus/Michael put in as much with this too, even though he'll go pphhhfffttttt... lololol

      ya know what men are like with the praise thingimibob...


      • AJ Morelli gold member
        November 2, 2007
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        it was all you Gill, let's admit it...lol but seriously, congrats to you both on such fine work...



  • EvilKate
    November 2, 2007
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    I work from home, so have not the limitations poor Night Hope suffers ... *swoon*



    Seriously! - SO cannot wait for the next installment

    What?!!

    What do you mean you haven't written it yet. C'mon you two - get cracking already!


    • NurseChilly gold member
      November 2, 2007
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      oohhhh whip me, beat me, tie me to a tree and call me barbara..... - ahem - hhehehehhehe ooopps, wrong thing there.... i mean, crack the whip katie...
      hahhahahahha

      thankie Sis....


      • EvilKate
        November 2, 2007

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        I'd rather tie you to Barbara and call that a tree *I know, we artistic types are odd*

        • NurseChilly gold member
          November 2, 2007

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          odd??? nah........ warped maybe.. but not odd...

          • EvilKate
            November 2, 2007
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            *Ahem* You are calling 'me' ... odd?!!

            How very very dare you! hehehe


  • Night Hope gold member
    November 2, 2007
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    "I now lay to die
    and yet Henry, remembrance of us, is not bitter,

    but a history waiting to be told.
    Our lives, our love, the wars, the arguments
    banishment and betrayals,

    shall weep from this nib and ink out in truths."

    Ohhh...This is my absolute favorite penning from you, my Friend...& that's sayin' a lot, considerin' I love everything you write. Such sweeping grandeur, such utter magnificence pours from every line. I have chills runnin' up & down my spine. I would swoon, even, but I'm at work & they kinda frown on that. Completely beautiful, soulful, poignant & majestic...as is deserving, considering the subject. I love that movie & the picture is fabulous, Sweetie. Good luck in the contest...everybody else. Wanda


    • NurseChilly gold member
      November 2, 2007
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      hehehhehe

      thank you Wanda..... so glad you liked it hun.... really, I know Michael appreciates all the kind comments too...


      • Night Hope gold member
        November 2, 2007

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        You are both such amazing talents, the two of you combined is...well...combustible. Gorgeous. See ya. Gotta work now. At least it's Friday.

  • Suzanne Dia
    November 2, 2007

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    I'm looking forward to more of this. You two are spinning a tale I want to know more about. This reads like some of my favorite books, drawing me in through narrative and personal thought. I need that in a story.

    Really really nicely done, both of you.


    • NurseChilly gold member
      November 2, 2007
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      thankie suzi.... glad you liked, and yes there will be more of this series...

      they have a great story from which poetry/prose can be made...


  • misselaineous
    November 2, 2007
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    i like what you have done here
    very muchly


  • IronIcecream
    November 2, 2007
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    dam'
    you nurse
    for making me feel the voyeur jester


  • Nicolette gold member
    November 2, 2007
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    A story within a story, history being made within history. This is mind-blowing poetry, you two - yes, really enough to blow the socks (and many other clothing items) off!!

    I just loved this and the way you've weaved your own personal voices with those of yesteryears. Of course the lion-touch spoke to this South African fan of yours. Wow... ain't love great.... no matter the period, the time, modern or old, ordinary man/woman or royalty... This is a classic, my friends. Loved these lines:

    "a dowry worth gold and a fertile
    woman, an amazonian warrior."

    hmmmmmm "fertile woman"... In Afrikaans we have a saying that some women are "sappig" - which means "juicy"... lol, look where you took my mind. Great great piece of art you've created here!

    ~ Nicolette


    • NurseChilly gold member
      November 2, 2007
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      I love it when you tell me of your culture and the Afrikaans ... sappig... such a great word Bokkie Girl... you are a diamond in the earth... gem-eyes

      thank you Nicci....

      now girl, keep your -ahem- underwear on. I'm still waiting for Heidi to judge her contest

      hehehehheheheheheh


      • Nicolette gold member
        November 2, 2007

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        hehehehehe.... I've got my underwear on...let's see who keeps anything on after Heidi judged the contest, lololol. At least you know a few Afrikaans words by now... and you know about "bokkie girl" - and the springboks


  • alexandrathegreat
    November 1, 2007

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    Wow I am flattered you found so much inspiration in this contest. this is a full drawn out story of love in the ancient times I can entirely appreciate. The language is spot on. I loved the intense moments and the verbal irony. Thank you for this lovely piece both of you. Did each of you write one piece? Just curious.


    • NurseChilly gold member
      November 2, 2007
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      thank you so much

      we shared the writing of this piece.... I mainly did most of the writing with Michael giving his keen eye and superb editing and interjections of history and knowledge..

      thanks


  • Ariosto II. gold member
    November 1, 2007

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    Since I dote on historical fiction, you are leading me astray with this.
    I will get all wrapped up in the story and be unable to razor in with slashing critiques.

    But I do like it and shall follow along devotedly.

    When you have time read my last opus...An Argosy2/240 lines one comment

    ahhh I do bemoan the lack of attention span these days.


    good poem Nurse!!!


    • NurseChilly gold member
      November 1, 2007
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      David, you may use your razor at any time hun, slash away..

      i'd rather that and i know Michael would, than just gushing in historical blurbs... lololol

      so .... I shall come by and spark your goldfish attention deficits asap!!

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