long curve and head erect
buffy recline by the pool
arrogant and almost sensual
your image shines to reflect
send back a naked form
will Narcissus censure or discredit
leg bent in trifling frivolity
mirror what you should always be
Author notes
Narcissus: Greek Mythology - a youth who pined away in love for his own image in a pool of water and was transformed into the flower that bears his name
A contest entry
- PIF: Gods and Goddesses by SerenityNChains.
575 points, ended November 19, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Group Contest: Perspective by Sandal.
600 points, ended November 18, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This is a strong image with an interesting conclusion. Thanks for entering the group contest!
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Youth and vanity are fit companions, however, it can't last. The last two lines reflect the heartbreak of aging; nice use of imagery here.
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lovely
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Guilty
Very descriptive, I like it. nice work.
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This is beautiful.
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I love this tale of self admiration to the utmost extreme. It certainly keeps my ego in check! Anyway, this is beautiful. It is a verry concise, concrete image. Well done! Good luck in the contest!
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Interesting
I have managed to get through my life never hearing this before, so I found it quite interesting. I love it when I learn something. Good luck in the contest!
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A beautiful tale you wove here, full of imagery and metaphor. You paid homage well to this most conceited God.
Blessed be,
Billie Jean
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