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Redemption

Death writes sonnets on my skin
All my misdeeds and unforgivable sin
My blood is the ink my tears can’t wash away
No matter how many prayers I say

So take my heart from demons down below
Don’t ask my crimes you should never know
I may have killed I may have maimed
And I was tortured and never left the same

Save me my love from beyond death
And I will give you all with my last breath
Don’t leave my love while I writhe in pain
In this world of evil I am not to blame
Catch me my love as I fall from the agony
For only you can grant redemption to me

My soul has touch the living and the dead
It know the poison  from the heart and the head
If you can hold it like you hold me in the night
Then the world will disappear from our sight

We can live forever with destiny
No horror or gore again will we ever see
I promise no one can break my love or need
Nothing but you could make my heart bleed

Save me my love from beyond death
And I will give you all with my last breath
Don’t leave my love while I writhe in pain
In this world of evil I am not to blame
Catch me my love as I fall from the agony
For only you can grant redemption to me

I’m choking on the beauty of you
Your soul so pure and innocent and true
Soon I will surrender to its plea
To make me drown and fall to insanity

Save me my love from beyond death
And I will give you all with my last breath
Don’t leave my love while I writhe in pain
In this world of evil I am not to blame
Catch me my love as I fall from the agony
For only you can grant redemption to me

Author notes

Pete.My heart could stop beating and decay under earth.but it will never stop loving you.
xxx


option one.this song has seriously just been written.and the picture reminded me of it instantly.the need.the want.how you will go at any lengths for it (or at least thats what i got)

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  • TheDemonEve
    January 3, 2008

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    "Nothing but you could make my heart bleed." How delectable.

    Best of luck and thanks for entering!

  • Liquid memories
    December 10, 2007

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    thank you so much for sharing this moving write. success to you in the contest.


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    December 8, 2007

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    Very well done
    I truly enjoyed reading this one
    Thank you so much for sharing and for being a part of the contest


  • SixStringDebauchery
    December 5, 2007
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    I love you more than anything in the world.
    xxx


  • psychiatrists dream
    November 26, 2007

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    your rhyming style is the same as mine. I found it excellently written, well thought out, you should be proud of this, as it blows any of mine out of the water!!
    thanks for entering an good luck


  • dreamer wind
    November 5, 2007

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    Very strong poem you got there. Intersting to read fill with emotion. You have did a great job on this poem. Thank you for the entry and good luck
    Wish you the best
    Snow


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    November 5, 2007

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    this is a very, very good write from you. thank you for sharing its imagery with me and i wish you well in this contest that you have entered. viyanna rosemarie


  • Tarja
    November 3, 2007

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    This was a very strong and passionate piece. I personally found that the melancholy tone really added a dramatic and intense feel. This is very well done thank you so much for entering and good luck.

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