From a fatal accident heartwrenching news
Tear drops burst forth from a mother's eyes
Each time she travels on the solitary road of remembrance
Flowers in hands as she stands before his grave
Painful words of emptiness faint within her breath
as she continuously murmurs of an unforgettable love...
Innocent as a youth is her trial of fate
Blindness of joy pales her spirit of dreams
Blur reality of a soul much consumed and distressed
Pictures on the walls of a beloved son
Dedicated to a mother and a widow of an abusive husband
"Love always, love always... John, your son".
She'd cry herself to sleep at night
and each morning she'd drop a rose on the site
to be mired in a frozen emotion of a griefless pain.
"I miss you so much, she sighs",
"until we meet again."
Love always, Mom...
Author notes
Mackie
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Thank you for sharing with me. It really means a lot to me. I am very sorry for your loss. I know there is nothing to bring back your son, but hopefully one day you will be able to see him again, if you believe in that...
Beautiful poem..
Rose
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It made me cry...
thanks for the entry,
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Great write I love the title. And the intesity portrayed in this piece.
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Sad and heart wrneching, I like how it is a poetic story instead of making it completely one or the other, the diaglouge adds greatly. Best of luck anf thank you.
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A sad write full of poignant details.
Just one spelling mistake - "greifless" should be be "griefless"
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this poem was awesome. I want to read the rest of your poems. I am doing through a cell. I am finally getting my internet back on monday ill work on reading the rest of your work. I loved this and what a sad story. why does life have to be like this I guess there are trials so we learn just wish ii could walk on clouds all time skipping the valleys between the hills. I miss you a lot and hope you are doing well.
lots of love... mj -
I love it.
So Sad.
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wow...its a very sad poem. Its the saddest one I read, but it sounds beautiful. great job
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...This was really sad. I hate thinking that every single day, there's people out there that go through this pan. Very sad, good write. Thanks and good luck
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this is really sad!! i love this, its so sad and yet beautiful. i think it could both ways-he could be gay or straight, and the mother-a domestic violence survivor - has to go through losing her son in a violent thingy. i just completely summed this up-oops sorry.
i really loved this.
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Thanks for entering my contest and best of luck!
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Your words hit hard with a deep sadness that is unmistakable. Each line paints the pain and grief within the reader's mind. Thank you for entering. Best of luck to you!
Blessings
Bel
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There is a lot of emotion captured within the lines of this poem, and such a sad ones unfortunately... I hope this poem isn't written out of personal aspects, but that it came forth from imagination? If you had to deal with this, then I'm very sorry to hear about it - and I hope you'll grow out stronger in some way...
thank you for entering the contest - I wish you the best of luck!
Leander -
Pictures on the walls of a beloved son
Dedicated to a mother and a widow of an abusive husband
"Love always, love always... John, your son".
She'd cry herself to sleep at night
and each morning she'd drop a rose on the site
to be mired in a frozen emotion of a greifless pain
my best friend commited suicide the week before our graduaton and I will never forget teh pain of looking at the pictures on his mother's wall. thanks for this great write.
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Aw that's just so sad! It's always really heartwrenching when a parent has to experience loosing a son or daughter. It shouldn't go that way. Very well written, you definitely got it all out there. Good job!
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WOW!!!!!!!!
Every poem I read from you astonishes me!
Now don't get a big head though
But I do mean it
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You wrench on the heartstrings of the reader with the sadness in your words. Grief is so hard to describe as we all feel different levels. You have described despair within the stanzas of this piece..Great emotional writing.
Soulful Woman
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So true and so beautiful a write
Yes within a mothers soul when a piece is torn away her greif of such a loss is unbearable . Only time and a thousand tears shall heal that soul and in the knowing that the piece lost will truly be rejoined within heavens gate
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If this poem is based on a true story…I am saddened to know this tragic incident…Losing someone we love is always a very painful thing especially if a mother loses her son…I like the sad tone of your poem…very sincere…thank you for sharing your write…
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This poem is so sad it made me want to cry. A parent should never have to burry a child and it is so heart breaking that it happens so offten. I know a few people who have been through this tragedy and it kills me to see how much pain they are in when ever memories flood gates burst open. You have heart wrenchingly captured the consuming emotions of fear and loss here. This was a very well written peice and I really enjoyed reading it. Thanks for entering! Great write and good luck in the contest!
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Wow, I really liked this. I can only imagine how sad it must be for a parent to have to bury his/her child. You captured all of my senses in this picture of grief so well-painted. Very well done, dear poet, and good luck in the contest.
Blessings,
L.
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I enjoyed reading this, If all your work is this good. you have talent.
Good luck in the contest.
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A very deeply moving poem, sad, and detailed. I could feel your words. Good luck in your contests.
Candice
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Thank you for your entry!
Split thoughts on this wonderful poem of sorrow! Sorrow on one hand and relief on the other. A very intense write! The issues are so well discribed in this piece. The sadness she feels engulfs my heart and I feel her pain. Can also feel her love for her son as he was there for her. Very well done! Don
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nice job
message was well presented. pretty straight forward though, except for paragraph three. that paragraph was my favorite. try to put more of that flowery lyrical feeling i sense in all of your other poems.
overall, good work.
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Very rich in content. Deep in emotions and smoothly written. My only suggestion would be to change the last line, it is a bit of a tongue twister, at least for me.
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Very deep and hearfelt. A beautifully written piece of true sorrow and loss. An often too true fate of life.
Nicely worded, with smooth flow and ligth metaphor...which makes it read very well.
Best to you!
mystic
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I like how you wrote this simple and clear. The imagery though was truely beautiful. I can picture her crying. How sad... You captured her feelings through your words that sounded so sincere and emotional. lovely work again.
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