I'm standing alone wondering how it could have happened,
trying hard not to cry, wanting only to hide,
the pain is overcoming me,
I realize that I have feelings for you,
but not wanting to believe it I run,
how can I love someone who doesn't love me,
how can I care about someone who could care less about me,
why do I put myself through this,
I am lost again in this maze called the world,
lost in the twist and turns,
and here I am holding the pieces of my broken heart,
trying to find a way to put it back together,
trying to put my life back together,
looking for a way out,
trying to forget you.
Author notes
Option 8 but i wrote it before so i had to put it in as a prewrite...sorry
*Nina*
this is a new one about someone i recently just started liking and i'm freaking out cause at this play thing i held hands with him(it's a thing we do before we go on stage) and now i'm lost cause the feelings i started to get got even worse and all i want to do is forget him!
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make it into a poem. It has a beautiful concept... just make it into a smoother flow ...
i cant see it as a poem at this moment because if you put it all into a paragraph without line breaks, it works just the same
play with it a little. add some imagery. try not to use the word "i" so much
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well in thta cae I cannot allow it as a option 8 but Ill allow it as a prewrite or you you can use this option contain in numbre two: some moment you want to forget. Ill add that to you lol. I really enjoyed your poem so there it is settled. place in prewrite it shall be.
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wonderful poem .Ive been there and belive me Its hard to forget but with time the feelings dissapear. good job but please write the option and your name in the author notes. thnak you and good luck!
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