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Day of Destiny (Part III)

With grace, I halt to behold

This image of carnage that lies before thee

Who may I be to judge; my uncertainty of this victim, threefold

Whom hath spoken her last word her in this wretched sea

Of consciousness....

 

Praise the Gods for thy sanity, and yet this sorrow

 

For this soul lain betwixt two volatile gushes

 

Of water...and so I kneel to pray for this beauty whom shall not know tomorrow

 

Relinquishing thy dignity, I am to tears

 

In this garden of tragedy, I pray to the Gods her soul shalln't dispose

 

"Art thou with me, for I hath served well all these years..."

 

Alas! The Gods hath passed judgement upon thee....with vitality she rose!  

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Wasn't certain of what the warrior sees before writing this. Critique as you will.

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  • Tenshi Asakura
    November 2, 2007
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    forgot this....again...


  • Tenshi Asakura
    November 2, 2007
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    oh my! this one is brilliant. absolutely. i've been waiting for the third part and here it is. I like your religious allusion. that ending was just amazing! well crafted i must say. I am really intrigued by the story, wanting to know what the whole plot is. though it is good so far. i love how all of your poems are written in first person


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    November 1, 2007
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    This is a great piece Very NIce.