From the path where I stand,
From the path where I walk.
If I could only have another chance
To get back from the path that I chose.
Here standing, thinking again;
I took a deep breath,
I don't know how long would it take
For me to accept things of now.
I am here at the path,
Overlooking at all things
I cannot decide,
Will I go or not?
And if I will, and where?
Is it the one leading where the sun set?
Or I should go the way where the stream goes?
I cannot declare myself to be.
The only thing I know is that
I need to go.
But, wait a minute?
Should I not decide now?
It's because I know
No matter what decision I'll make.
This would create something that I need not to repent for.
Back from reminiscing
Where I finally found my self
I still continue and move
though I know life for me is not good.
But why need to be affect my self more
Though knowing that this is not my last turn.
Because I still breath
and feel the warmth inside me.
For I know that there are lots of things that wait me.
I need to strive, Why not pursue?
It's to live and don't mind all my regretion.
Here I am now;
I stand and I fight.
For whatever reason and action will I do.
I believe that the road not taken
Is having it's second chance for me to go on.
A contest entry
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Title: 5/5- I love this title
Venting: 35/50- If this poem accomplished anything it was musing rather than venting. Philosophical, but not appropriate for this contest.
My Personal Like/Dislike: 8/15- Many awkward phrases that made it difficult to understand.
Followed Rules: 0/20- older than one month
Grammer/Spelling: 5/10- questionable grammar in places, very common vocabulary.
Total: 53/100
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Okay so i realize that this is the road not take by robert frost, but I really like that poem, so i just made me more of a harsh judge than i already am. You got your point across, but i also feel that you were repeating the same thought over and over.... and over...
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Title: 5/5-
Venting: 40/50- you could of said more
My Personal Like/Dislike: 15/15- Beautiful background
Followed Rules: 0/20- date is more tne a month old
Grammer/Spelling: 10/10-
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this is a thought ive pondered on before
oh if we could
this poem has a great message
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beautifull write but ver hard to the see the writing uyou may need to change the color
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thank you! Try to look for ot again and tell wehter i fits your eye, or you can even suggest what kind of font color you prefer.
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