Serenades echo across steel seas,
lone voice drifting along the breeze.
Moonlight dancing with the stars,
kissing waves from afar.
Hopes to charm a mate,
with soulful bait.
Whales song is
strongly
sung.
Author notes
Pre~write
POY
Theme; Whale searching for a mate in Nonet form.
A contest entry
- Round 3 ~ of 5 - ONLY 15 will advance to the FINAL ROUND by Florida Sunshine.
525 points, ended November 8, 2007, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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No
I have to agree with Bear. Had I read this earlier I definitely would have scored it, but compared to others I've already read now, I don't think it would score well enough on my board.
These shorter forms are so hard to get a lot of emotion and depth into, but that doesn't mean it isn't quality writing...which I found this to be. 
Best wishes always,
~J. -
No ~
I cringed when I typed No, as this is really a pretty entry.....but I just can't see this entry beating some of the other entries I have read thus far ~
I wish you the best with your other entry,
Bear ~
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Yes
Good luck. -
Yes~
Great use of form, and a wonderful poem,
Good luck~ -
This is very lovely! And I think the shape is neat, too. Love your wording.
Best wishes in the contest.
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I wrote a nonet the other day this is great.I think they are fun. Good luck with this too.
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this is not only a whales charm. You put is as well in this nice nonet.
~Sonja~
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Whales song is strongly song. This is gorgeous.
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Hi,
I liked this poem very much You are a very good writter!
Well Done keep up the hard work
Good Luck In the Contest!
XxSarahxX
God Bless You And All How Care For You! -
Good write here
Yes the song of the whales are saying much more than we can ever decifer for they are the ancients of the seas -
AWESOME and wonderful, I love what you have done here!!!!!!!!!!!!!! excellent! you always make me smile! love you ~blessings always~
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Wooo whooo!
love this Nonet!
"kissing waves from afar.
Hopes to charm a mate,
with soulful bait."
beautiful imagery
and I love your metaphors.
Great write!
~Pastel
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Perfect Nonet~ I also caught the rhyming aabbccdef~ making the final line "Whales song is strongly sung" like a metaphoric profound statement of the entire write ~ Nice job!
P.S. Kudos for you being such a good sport!!!! I like the fact I saw you going to each entry and at least providing some kind of support to each poet. ~~~ I wish I could add a trophy for that! Cause hands down you'd have it!
Congrats on making it to this round ~ good luck to you! Nice job! -
Excellent Write Great flow and imagery. Good luck in the contest
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Absoutely amazing. The :serenades echos across steel seas" "with soulful bait". This is so sensous.
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