& darling,
we lie awake in each other's oxygen
[breathe in. breathe out.]
[I'm pretty sure
two hearts could have felt this before
but all that matters now is you&i.]
lover,
i'll cover you
though the night be dead
& the trees grow hollow
i'll stand on this side of the street
watching you shine, glow like stars
that never knew how to dart across the sky.
tiny sparkles of love
swirl around my head
as the words envelope my swollen lips
[.oh, this could be love.]
& without you,
[killer] would've been plastered across love's forehead
without your love,
[death] would've been written across my body
[through the head, the lips, the fingers]
[& when you took my hand,
you took my heart with it]
Once upon a time,
there was a girl&boy
[boy fell first]
& girl went crash kaboom
& the boy never saved her
[let's be a backwards Jack & Jill story
& we'll both save each other in the end.]
Author notes
Ted is amazing. period.
A contest entry
- I WANT LOVE!!!!!! by Breaking Inside.
450 points, ended November 9, 2007, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
& baby, kaleidoscope eyes dull after a few bottles of romance.
Comments
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this is great how creative good flow enjoyed.
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wow, this is amazing. It's simply written and maybe a bit confusing the first time you read it but the emotion is undeniable. Well done and congratulations.
In writing,
The Black Poet
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[& when you took my hand,
you took my heart with it]
&&
[let's be a backwards Jack & Jill story
& we'll both save each other in the end.]
I LOVE this.
so much.
and i'm so glad that you have it.
i'm so jealous of it :]
but so happy for you YAYY!
good job baby.♥
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