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The Stars

Upon a silver unicorn,
she rides.
In a world divided, separated, and torn,
in the stars she confides.

Her dress torn from war,
she rides.
Her nation is bloody and filled with gore,
But still in the stars she confides.

Her wings once strong now lay broken, upon her back
as she rides.
Her palace, once so pure, is now black,
And still in the stars she confides.

A Fae of a nation once so grand, she looks down
as she continues to ride.
And with her broken wings she jumps to the ground,
And within her the stars confide.

When she hears the children cry,
She knows once again she must ride.
She cannot and will not let her nation die,
For in the stars they will confide.

Yelling to a crowd,
below her trusty ride.
She tells them her story, mighty and loud,
and how in the stars they must confide.

Trusting her they say it with her,
“Tonight with power we will ride,
we are here for our nation and plan to cause quite a stir.
Because tonight within the stars we confide.”

And with that the sky was lit,
as she continued to ride.
With that evil was gone, that was it!
Now forever in the stars will they confide.

Author notes

http://spiritsighs.deviantart.com/art/Faerie-Queene-27861325 this is a pic that could very possibly resmble this fae

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  • Dark Otter
    December 5, 2008
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    A beautiful, moving piece!

    I read it twice to get its feel. It has a power to it that in its simplicity does affect.


  • Draig aine gold member
    November 28, 2008
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    oh yes

    very fine write


  • ennovy silver member
    November 22, 2008

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    Thank you for entering this contest....nice work keep penning...........novy


  • maa gold member
    April 8, 2008

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    what a wonderful spirit-tale … we should all learn to trust the stars more than our minds … or maybe a healthy combination of both ? … your poem is very beautiful, and the repetitions further enhance the message you wished to transmit … if we would learn how to consult the elements of nature instead of consulting internet and the news in television, I guess the guidance would have a different quality … using our intuition and gut-feeling to be guided, and being attentive to inspiration, synchronicities and dreams …
    your poem is a wonderful reminder of the necessity to listen to our hearts …

    thank you,
    maa


  • Lorien
    February 29, 2008
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    Hmm I like the flow and the story thats weaved into it


  • TwiztidMaggot
    January 19, 2008

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    This is really good. I like how you wrote this peice. Congrats on all your wins and good luck in my contest. keep up your amazing work!!!

    Crimson


  • Polaja Greeters member
    December 4, 2007

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    This is a beautiful poem... I like the strength and power that came through your words... this almost reminds me of a battle song... a very well-written poem indeed... thank you for sharing

    Keep writing

    Polly


  • Lively Matter
    November 30, 2007

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    Wonderful! Fantastic write, I really liked how you ended each stanza with her confiding in the stars, and the end especially. Great write if all the other poems are this good it might be a hard to judge contest ^_^


  • Rebekah-Ann silver member
    November 16, 2007

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    wow this was really so lovely.... scary to think I have to compete with this great poetry....

    All the best!!

    Becks


  • Passionate Phoenix
    November 4, 2007
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    many thanks poet. i really loved the imagery. vry well done and thanks for entering xx

  • Passionate Phoenix
    November 4, 2007
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    nicely written but please re-read the rules x


  • PageTurner
    November 4, 2007

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    You had me under your spell from word one!
    Your way with words and impeccable imagery was divine...

    "Upon a silver unicorn,
    she rides.
    In a world divided, separated, and torn,
    in the stars she confides."

    Congratulations on the BRONZE, Poet!

    ~ Nicky♥


  • Purplemoondoll
    November 4, 2007

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    Excellent Storytelling

    There was very little between the top three poems in this contest.I love your storytelling style, the imagery was excellent and the poem flowed like a dream. Well done on achieving third. Thaks for your entry.


  • crazziladi
    November 1, 2007
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    wow such powerful words


  • Purplemoondoll
    November 1, 2007
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    Beautifully Written

    Thank you for entering the contest. I will comment more when judging is finished BUT this is a wonderful write full of imagery and emotion - very well done.

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