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Obsession

When I look,
I hate what I see
I hate how I look
I hate the way that sickening image is me
I know that girl is who I am
But why so ugly
I am getting over this, I am
What the hell my eyes are so buggy
This lump on my shoulders it looks like a disease
Why must I look so gross
I am fat, it’s a disease
Stay back, don’t get close
Tonight my looks will change
To wake up beautiful, is my dream
But I know deep down I cannot change
This sickness is deeper than it may seem
I hate this mirror
Why can’t it be ugly too
Someone please take this mirror
It’s what makes my obsession true
I am so fake
I try to change the image I see
But it too is fake
I spent so much time changing me
I want to live, without this reflection
And I want to be real
Why must I even look at this reflection
This thing makes it so hard to deal
I will change
I will kill the mirror
I will fight
I will be real

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  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    February 5, 2008

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    I don't care much for the way I look either, but then again I know that if I was someone else, I'd want to be someone else and on and on and on, as there's no such thing as perfection, so it would last forever. Ah, to the way life is. But still, wish I could lose a LITTLE weight...


  • Romily
    November 25, 2007

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    I never heard so much complaints about oneself. but you managed the work entirely awesome.

    I try to change the image I see
    But it too is fake
    I spent so much time changing me
    I want to live, without this reflection
    liked this lines.
    love.


  • yogi59
    November 7, 2007

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    Beauty lies in the heart. You dont need a mirror to look beautiful ! Nature is beautiful because it is hapazard with different shape and size.Ultimately beauty lies in the eyes of beholder.All the best!!


  • VioletMasquerade
    November 6, 2007

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    Needs a bit of work

    At this point, since we are still early in the competition... I am critiquing. I like the theme you have here. Be mindful of your punctuation, and I think you should go through the poem and try not to use the same word more than twice... expand your vocab. Don't be afraid to use a thesaurus. Your foundation is good. Just pull deeper and use more exacting words.


  • Tattboyspet
    November 6, 2007
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    Please note - I have handed the judging over to my co-judge Tattboy. He will be judging it tonight.


  • Tattboyspet
    November 1, 2007

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    Hmmmm ... this one is filled with anger and only once a person can accept themselves will they be accepted by everybody else (lmao! hey, that's what they keep telling ME!!!!)


  • GoodKnightPoet
    October 31, 2007

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    I like this poem. It tells a lot about image and self perception. There are times I wish we had no mirrors, but we have people who will tell us how we look even if they do not say a word.

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