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I Need To Know

I need to know you love me
to know if I love you in return.
I get so confused and tired
your feelings I want to learn.

Is it safe to say I want you
or will the feeling go away?
It depends on when I'm around you
and how you act that day.

But I need to know that you need me
because then I could need you too.
Maybe you could hold me in your arms
because feel it maybe we do.

The look in your eyes tells me
that the thought is on your mind.
Your smile is warm and pleasing
perhaps my heart you could bind.

I need to know you think of me
more than you think of her.
Then I could think of you more than him
and our love would be for sure.

We're starting to get closer
I've noticed our passion grow.
But not understanding overwhelms me
if you love me I need to know.

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  • Lislaine
    August 23, 2008

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    I LOVE ITTT!!!!!!! no more words are needed to express how I feel about this poem


  • With Broken Wings
    February 23, 2008

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    Thanks for entering! Its a good write.. you should try to ad more feeling thugh.. Other than that I really enjoyed reading this =] Lots of Luck!

    <3 Lifes Sorrow


  • a gothic romance
    October 31, 2007

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    wow this is bland. i'm sorry, but the only thing that separates this from a letter to someone is the ABAB rhyming scheme.
    i didn't find any deep metaphors or adjectives. every line was a simple explanation.
    hall-mark would love this, but i feel poetry is about expanding the use of writing. about digging deep into the core of your heart and soul and expressing it in a way no one else ever could.
    poetry is about baring your soul and laying it out onto a piece of paper in an original way.

    i think you would greatly benefit from a long gazing into the ocean or lake, or some place of great natural beauty, and free-writing all the different adjectives and metaphors for how it makes you feel.
    i feel you are holding back your truest emotions.
    it seems to me you are afraid, so you stick to this formal structure.
    i'd love to see what you come up with afterwards.
    thank you for entering


    • Voodoo Eyes
      November 1, 2007
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      I'd enter something else instead, if you'd let me, but I couldn't garentee it'd be good enough. Thanks for the criticism though. This is one of my most recent things and I actually got my thoughts the way I wanted them in this one. I guess I'm just not too sure what you're looking for. Still, thanks.