I exist not of you
I exist for you
For your need to rest your ebony tresses
Within my lap of subtle comfort
Youthful thoughts of you are Effervescence
Distinction and presence stands proud before you
But never shall I, look down upon you
Though your stature remains this beauty diminutive
No possession of you will be so figurative
I stay lost within your hazel mist
Your eyes allude to past restrictions
These visions of you, become amiss
When thoughts fall short of exclusive seduction
These shades of blue resembles my mood
Your heart I lose as I seek reassurance
Emotions dismantled from a fortress made crude
My heart has paid this mortal insurance
Remain the light that illuminates my view
As my journey goes forth to be with you
Author notes
#1. You can write a poem of seduction aimed towards me.
Name: Christina
Age: 20
Height: 5'1"
Eyes: Hazel
Hair: Black
Favorite Color: Blue
I use everything but your name. Hope it worked
A contest entry
- Seduce Me by Midnight Lace.
525 points, ended November 2, 2007, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Girls Talk/Boys Talk By Aurielle NEW: QUICK CONTEST!!!!! by Aurielle.
550 points, ended November 13, 2007, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
This is new to me but I thought it was a challange
Comments
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Wonderfully done..I like how you used her appearance to enhance this poem..Congrats on the HM!
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It was a twist to what I wanted to write so thank U.
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"I stay lost within your hazel mist
Your eyes allude to past restrictions
These visions of you, become amiss
When thoughts fall short of exclusive seduction"
That is an amazing stanza. I am so pleased to see a trophy on this piece. Quite remarkable. A pleasure to have read and enjoyed. Well done. ~Pamela 
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I am so honored to have you review my poems. thank U. I played off her qualities. it was fun
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Very sensual and seductive
Also full of love and respect
A real pleasure to read
Love ~sugar~
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Thanks Sweetness - I appreciate you always
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the closing line of each stanza is especially brilliant! what wonderful comparisons... I am fascinated by your mind... unique expression to be certain, particularly "effervescence"...
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Thank you, I wanted to be loving, sensual but respectful as well. I try to move pass the same expression. It should be different takes on perhaps the same subject. Thanks for your kind and sincere words ~ Mykeee
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This was quite sensual and poetic heartfelt
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Beautifully Penned
This is a classic seduction and well written, you are like a spiders web, beautiful and sticky. The suave trap of desires weaved to capture beauty. You do this so well Son................Mom
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Thank U mom - I wanted to incorporate her personal qualities and make it respectful as well. Thanks again mom
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I like how you incorporated what I listed on the contest page. I also like how this is shinning with respect and admiration. Thank you for an endearing poem and for entering my contest.
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Thank U - the in your face stuff ain't me. Thanks for the HM. You had some good entrys in this one ~ Mykeee
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I am so sorry once again....
how could I have missed this one, Keee
Forgive me my dear friend, this is absolutely stunning work you have penned here for this challenge. I loved the choice of words and the mesmerizing moments you penned here. Great job
I'm sure she will be please with such Beauty.
Ephiphany
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Thanks - I appreciate it Coco Cherry.
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Exellent
You have doen a great job here, it seems to ave worked out in my opinion, excellent write, thank you for sharing and keep them coming. Good Luck in the contest.
raingoddess
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