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Time For A Change

There are scars that can not be depicted
they have no visual view
there are wounds that go deeper than heartaches
and they dance to a silent tune.

In the interim of enlightenment
some things just seem to get through
there's lost moments of anti-endurance
that are lacking in depth, tone and hue.

Many feelings of self-contradictions
believing what's not really true
cornered in vast mental anguish
what then's really left to do?

 

It's time for a change, no more waiting

this needs to be rooted and canceled

there's no space for this kind of wrong

these are the worst kind of villains.

These are our children of promise
ripped from the emotional scene
this thing must stop, let's get on it!
does anyone feel what I mean?

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  • individuality gold member
    March 4, 2008

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    ah life is full of nutters sadly, those that wish to bring harm on the young and innocent. the world is mad, a good poem.


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    November 30, 2007

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    Child abuse is wrong and often is targeted in the wrong way, by the wrong people.
    I know how you mean that some scars go deeper than just a wound on your thigh or a cut on the wrist, but actually have a long term mental effect on you. Abuse is one of these.
    Mental / emotional / psychological abuse is terrible. Sometimes it's hard to detect and even harder to prove, because there are no visible signs.
    This write is very true and I believe more people should listen to this kind of message. Thanks for posting.


    • 2lullabyhaven
      November 30, 2007
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      Wow, this is a wonderful review for me to receive..thanks so very much, and you are ever so right


  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    November 29, 2007

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    G'Day mate

    Very strong message you have penned deeply in your words here.
    Excellent write.

    Thank you for your entry
    Best of luck in the contest
    Stay safe
    ~AJ


  • Spiritual Soul silver member
    November 1, 2007

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    Powerul message. I love the last 2 lines of this, it is something that needs to be stopped. Wonderful job on this! Good luck!
    Thanks for your comment!
    ~Michaela~


  • Poetry and I Inc
    October 31, 2007

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    Great Rhyme

    This was a very well structured piece depicting the all-too truthful reality of how this inappropriate behavior leaves one feeling for years to come. The only thing I would have changed is splitting up the last two stanzas. Also, I would choose a word other than "fabrical" in the last stanza, as it doesn't fit and is not actually a word. Otherwise, your thoughts were expressed very well and I loved the rhyme scheme: it flowed seamlessly. Good luck in the contest and thanks for entering!! ~Inc."

    • 2lullabyhaven
      November 1, 2007
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      Thank you so much, I really tried to split it, and for some reason it wouldn't take, so after four attempts, I just let it be...I'll try to find another word, my vocab is so limited, not my strong suit hahaha we'll see...

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