The ghost of that moment torment me still,
making my eyes glisten with unbearable hurt.
How their parting, his strong face wouldn't conceal-
sorrow gladly becoming his heart's consort.
Arresting my welling tears for the moment,
I constructed enough courage to console him.
Oh, their parting to his heart was pure torment-
for his chances of ever holding him again grow slim.
His sobs raked my heart through and through,
breeding a storm in my eyes.
Blimey, this parting, a child of fate's treacherous rendezvous,
I just pray for the strength to coax his heart with more lies.
On my own side of the fence I sit now - alone;
wondering if this gallery of phantasmagoria would ever peter out.
"Lord, this parting has taken its toll on me"; - I moan;
dewy-eyed, my sadness at its climax drops a gout.
Author notes
This is one sad tale i experienced, figure it out. Can ya?
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i love how u put passionate words into this poem i wish i could help with the pain but all i can offer is a friend so keep writing i really love readin these poems u writ
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dis is so heart braking it makes me want to cry great work on expressing yourself
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its so full sadness and despair.. n i couldnt get the situation..
well ur rhyming was nice.. dosn seem so forced excptthe second line-making my eyes glisten with unbearable hurt.- im not sure its coorect to say hurt- hurt is liek verb-in action.. i feel it be bettr if its pain or ache but thn it wont go with ur rhyming..but i loved ur first line"the ghost of that moment" nice
well best of luck ma frined.. keep writng
abuyi
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yea,i know dis one man.i feel for u.God would see you through this sad part of ur life.take heart.
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