A golden glimmering sunset
Heaven connecting with earth
Red sun drops bouncing from the sea
A majestic paradise surf
Each golden lined cloud
A breathtaking fantasy
A sky of burnt amber
Captivating me
The array of wondrous colours
Pale pink, turquoise and red
A colourful vision
Forever treasure in my head
A contest entry
- Sunsets by lucy sky-diamond.
1150 points, ended November 6, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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some nice ideas here, but i am afraid to say it is a bit cliche. you have some good initial thoughts, and i like the lines
sky of burnt amber
and
majestic paradise surf
but i think were ytou to make this a bit more 'your own', you could create a masterpiece.
but thank you for having entered, and this piece does have some great qualities
lucy
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spectacular!
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