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her short days blend longer than mine

 
 

 

 

 
Great-grandmothers
who witnessed water shift
to blood-
 
a history in Elder song
sounding down years,
measured in sunlight
broken
by roundly pearled night.
It came and went
in patches of darkness,
 
like mother:
who cannot reconcile
old age or accept
forgetful;
unable to recover
faces she loved,
even those dead.
 
      [ especially one
                       she lost twice. ]
 
Voices insist
she stood cemetery watch
beside empty earth,
 
where a child was swallowed
and soil shall someday comfort mother;
but not yet, nor all at once,
bits of mind will fold in turns,
each buried alone:
 
she keeps secrets
from herself-
 
perhaps she is wise,
only knowing loss
because they say so-
 
murdered child,
bits and pieces scattered
in bush land
 
         [ and behind dark eyes ]
 
where willy-wag tails
visit to sing of loss
she cannot hold.
 
Daughter is gone
and a twin cannot
understand
enough to grieve,
 
carries it all,
a parent's shattering
stacked with own:
chopped firewood,
splinters rising
with a needle's touch to mind;
whispers - from those
                once known.
 
There will be balance-
when bodies reunite
beneath black soil
and spirits
rock in earthen arms
 
grey marble will
forget us all,
 
but they will have
song.
 
 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • thirdeye
    November 12, 2007

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    There is much in this that seems very personal to the author and some would criticize that, but I have found that it can work as long as some additional elements are worked into the writing such as the intriguing imagery you present and some "universalities" if you will to help give the reader a connection. You've acheived a nice balance in this. I just commented on Melissa's piece that t deserved to be read more than once, the same is true of this.

  • Rowan gold member
    November 2, 2007

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    so heartbreaking, I know many people who have lost children and weeks, months, and years become endless...
    so skillfully written, and beyond.
    wow.


  • michael thomas gold member
    November 1, 2007

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    Kate, this is like a long plain chant from the sides of a pillared church seeping with incense and hooded parishioners ........It evokes ancient words to me...nicely done.... My Patricia lost a child and she still suffers from it to the moan of the two children that did not die and who can never replace her beloved Paul drowned at six.....


  • layla.
    October 31, 2007

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    you woman! are you planning to clutter my bookmark page? LOL i shall bookmark it too. very very strong! the strongest i read from you


  • NurseChilly gold member
    October 31, 2007

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    such a strong write... sad, longing and the bonds of family and the ties that bind us, through those grieving times...

    the imagery in this sis is superb... stoic and steadfast...

  • Suzanne Dia
    October 31, 2007

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    Yes, this turned out really really nicely. I know how hard you worked on it, as well. You've cleared transitions up really well.



    thank you

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