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Eternal Erudition

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Eternal Erudition

My journey began as journeys begin
I settled within the coach of my soul,
the horses neighed and we started to roll,
to tour all the places my heart had been.
The carriage rocked, past the graveyard of sin.
I could see where my heart had paid its toll,
apparitions of life that demons stole,
they drank of my spirit to my chagrin.

The coachman then drove away from the past
with a crack of his whip I heard him say;
"now all things will fade and nothing will last,
we’ll now take the road to a brighter day".
On to the future, the coach went so fast,
my lesson in life was learning to pray.

 

 

 

Author notes

Petrarchan sonnet:
The Italian sonnet is divided into two sections by two different groups of rhyming sounds. The first 8 lines is called the octave and rhymes:
a b b a a b b a
The remaining 6 lines is called the sestet and can have either two or three rhyming sounds, arranged in a variety of ways: c d c d c d
c d d c d c
c d e c d e
c d e c e d
c d c e d c
The exact pattern of sestet rhymes (unlike the octave pattern) is flexible. In strict practice, the one thing that is to be avoided in the sestet is ending with a couplet (dd or ee), as this was never permitted in Italy, and Petrarch himself (supposedly) never used a couplet ending; in actual practice, sestets are sometimes ended with couplets.
Art work: The Coach of Night by: *faile35

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  • Swan song gold member
    November 3, 2007

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    Excellent Petrarch would be proud of course he wrote his sonnets about his lover but I bet he'd give you a passing grade on this dear.


  • jo-el
    November 3, 2007

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    i like the way this petrarchan sonnet moves. and you worked it out just fine. i read this earlier this week and i just didn't have the time to deal with it like i wanted to. so i'm takin a second look and wow. the first stanza is genius in my eyes. the way you take us on this journey of body and soul and perhaps so much more is amazing. i felt like the subject and issues were so big that you could have taken this so much further and i was lovin the way it flowed so well, i was hopin it would go on. nonetheless you ended it well. prayer does help the ones with faith to push forward. excellent write


  • Never Fall in Love
    November 1, 2007

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    Brilliant metaphor!

    I settled within the coach of my soul,
    the horses neighed and we started to roll,

    Your sonnets are simply the best. Crafted with extreme professionell and never lets down anyone. What more can I tell you that I haven't already?
    Just decided to pass by, drop my 2 cents and walk away. But you make me want to stay here stunned...

    Never ♥


    • Amera gold member
      November 1, 2007
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      Thanks sis; you always inflate my balloon


  • blueyez
    November 1, 2007

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    I loved it and I especially loved the way the first stanza reads. You are amazing!
    Peace and Love


  • HaleyMary
    October 31, 2007

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    Beautiful write, Sis. Wonderful form, as usual.
    I liked the beginning of the second stanza. It made me think of going towards the future and moving on in life. Best of luck in the contest.


  • PerVirtuous
    October 31, 2007

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    I love what you have done with this. I am assuming it was conscious. I am just beside myself with joy to see you write like this. You make me want to write for you.


  • freespirit51
    October 31, 2007

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    Beautiful and exciting piece of poetic artistry my friend. it was a real pleasure to read this piece. I hope to one day write a sonnet but I don't think I am ready for that yet.. Thanks for the great read and good luck in the contest.


  • WhisperingSpirit
    October 31, 2007

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    Wow what a ride my friend
    to show what has been lived from the past
    To have taught a lesson of the future
    And then the ending remarkable
    As always our Dear God hears
    A prayer indeedmy friend Amera
    I love this poem
    You are a wonderful writter


  • Desire gold member
    October 31, 2007

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    Magnificent!!

    You pen this so gracefully and with that quill dancing across the pages
    Beautifully done Sweet Soul

    Love it and the form You used

    Thank You for sharing Your Talent!


    Love the line:
    Carriage rocked, past the graveyard of sin...

    Keep that quill dancing
    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • Nevel
    October 31, 2007

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    A beautifull example how to use metaphors in a sonnet!
    I don't understand what you mean by "the coachman".(I just started learning how to write a sonnet).Your poem has a depth I can't quiet comprehended,therefore,I like it more.(sounds silly?) Sincerely


    • Amera gold member
      October 31, 2007
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      Not silly at all; start with the English sonnet, it's the easiest.


  • Moodayo-Okohke silver member
    October 31, 2007

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    My Little Queen of form this is very good! I just love how you write like this My lesson in life was learning to pray...Gave me a smile...

    Black Crow~


  • StarEyes
    October 31, 2007

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    Ok. You have done it! You have left me totally speechless here! I am just gonna say great job! and

    Best of luck in this contest!!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • Ithica silver member
    October 31, 2007

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    This is a very beautiful sonnet. I have gotten hooked on this type of sonnet myself and I know they are most difficult to put together. And the tale you have told is rich and delicious. Bravo! An awesome entry!

    • Amera gold member
      October 31, 2007
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      Thank you For me the sonnet isn't as hard as creating a closing sestet. I find a closing couplet is much easier. Mayby I've written too many English sonnets.


  • Tercil gold member
    October 31, 2007

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    I reckon you'd have no problem writing a book solely, as you have supassed recognition and entered the classical genre, you should be very pleased. Love, Tony


    • Amera gold member
      October 31, 2007
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      Thanks Tony, writing comes easy, I think it’s in my soul. It’s compiling that takes the time.


  • sunny day
    October 31, 2007

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    I will do a dance while I'm jumping up and turning around for this one. Maybe that River Dance that Johnathan Papelbon was doing after the sweet victory the Red Sox had. This is another beautiful sonnet that the Queen has presented to us and you most certainly took away my breath with the subject chosen. You created a masterpiece from the artwork used and as always the rhythm and rhyme are impeccable. The flow is quite smooth and I didn't falter at all while reading this beauty. Best wishes in the contest with this entry that sounds golden to me. I have to stop turning around in circles here, I'm getting dizzy. hehehe Love you my friend, Joyce

    • Amera gold member
      October 31, 2007

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      Thanks so much Joyce. You make me smile; "jumping up and turning around" was only required for yeaterday's poem.

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