Where does your garden grow, oh lord
in the valleys or on the hills,
surrounded by your majesty
or upon the window sills?
seeing them from the heavens
as you gaze upon the earth?
did you plant the seeds for us oh lord
before our time of birth?
Oh child of mine within you
is where my garden grows,
I sowed my seeds into mankind
when nourished knowledge flows.
Among the seeds are many weeds
that need to be destroyed,
indeed they'll need alot of light
if there to be enjoyed.
Feed them daily with constant love
they can not get enough,
it will strengthen them and kill the weeds
my seeds are very tough.
When your garden overflows
and your flowers are in bloom,
they are to be given to mankind
for my children to consume.
Author notes
we need to remove the hate and replace it with love, the weeds are negative or evil thoughts, we need to fill our thoughts with positive and love.
A contest entry
- Beginnings from Endings, Or From Nothing at All by OrangeMarmalade.
600 points, ended May 16, 9 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
how would you improve this poem
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This is very nice. I loved this line - it just hovered there in front of me, "...did you plant the seeds for us oh lord
before our time of birth?" You did wonderful with this; thanks for posting it. So many seeds have been planted and too few weeds have overgrown in and around us. Your advice here is wonderful...
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Awesome poetry you've written here!
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Magnificent!
Bravo! this was a lovely poem that
speaks truth through the rafters.
A sound message with brilliant expression.
Every thought is bursting with wisdom.
You are a talented poet with a brilliant mind.
Blessings and Peace!
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Excellent write
I am really enjoying reading your poetry. A girl after my own heart. I was surprised to read your words as they echo those that I have just written in my recent poem.
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Perfect comparison,
from the hills
to the sills
to within the soul,
to grow positve love.
Aesthete
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This Poem Needs your time to improve... its a great poem.. Line 4 is a ? .. I would of went with.. Or upon
the window sill?... Line 5.. Seeing them from the heavens...
I'm sorry This is a very nice Poem.. But I have seen your better Works...
You have what it takes to edit this one and make it so much Better...
Please don't be mad at me for being honest... It just says how would you improve this Poem...
Or am I missing something... Is this your privite contest...??? Your friend in Poetry.. JackReed3
If you get a chance read New Person Within...its really good... its in my files
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This is a lovely poem
But does not quite fit the contest as it was intended. It's perfect the way it is; but you might want to do some changing of phrasing or something to qualify. I appreciate the metaphors, though! -
WOW!!! this is fantastic a true tribute to the majesty and grace of the LORD, thank you so much for allowing me to read this excellent, your on my favorites now!
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I'm uplifted, filled with a peace and feel alive
thank you
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