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sudden rain

sudden rain-
the clatter
in her empty bowl

A contest entry

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  • micol
    November 9, 2007

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    Nicely open-ended; leaves much for the reader to interpolate, which is one of the things that make haiku so enjoyable. The more I read this, the more possibilities suggest themselves. Well done.

  • Seeking Peace silver member
    November 7, 2007

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    A different view of the rain, I like to see this thinking outside the box, well done on a great entry to this contest, goodluck

    Karen


  • ronnica
    November 3, 2007

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    nice, thoughtful, sad truth to tell,

    Do you think these small pieces are more easily read in the centre page?


  • azure85 gold member
    November 2, 2007

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    sudden rain-
    the clatter
    in her empty bowl

    Oh, this is very interesting. You can hear the rain, and the contrasting sound, nicely done.