Just one brief moment
To live a lifetime
To share a heartbeat
To whisper a dream
When you held me
Arms wrapped tightly
I could have died with you
Safe, warm, contented
I wanted nothing more
Nothing less
Knowing you loved me
I could have escaped
From the darkness
Fought my demons
Accepted my fate
But you left me
Lost, alone
With just memories
Swimming around
In my head
Swimming around
In my heart
The tide is strong now
And I know I’m drowning
Author notes
Heartbreak and Betrayal
5. Lonliness. Solitude
A contest entry
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Comments
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This is lovely and well written!I love the flow and choice of the words!
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This is a great piece! I loved it full of emotions and desires... Thank you for this wonderful entry!
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I'm sorry but could you please re enter this poem in a new contest i am holding because of some error made this contest will be shut down a new one will be started same type so don't change the poem please!
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This is a great poem. I especially love the part when it says "The tide is strong now
And I know I’m drowning"
Good luck in the contest! -
i love it and it's nicely written!
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I get it. I really do..such a strong feeling that it's overcoming. Very good write and thanks for adding it to the contest.=]
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this is very good. dramatic and just touch of darkness to give it a unique vibe to this poem. Thank you for entering.
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This was really well done. I could feel your pain here, so much it was almost solid.
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i think
you should break the line and seperate your last part from the rest. i think it just makes a bigger impact on the reader to see it this way.
but other then that, i liked it. good write
~the sad farewell
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