goodbyes fell around us like wounded soldiers
smiling, he hugged me tight; lifting me with ease
and softly choking: O.K. Darlin’ into my hair
he turned and walked down the tarmac quickly
with his cowboy gait and my heart...
as tears cleared the jaundiced smoke
from my eyes at last
Author notes
prompt: Nicotine eyes
7 lines or shorter
A contest entry
- Nicotine Eyes by amaranthine lover.
300 points, ended November 15, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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the feeling of this is lost and romanticised, interesting way going about the prompt thanks for entering
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I've read in you
this tender heart
that wishes more
than words well.
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hey! it's not nice to leave a comment...
that is more lovely than the poetry you are commenting on!
LOL!!!
what a beautiful comment...you should post it as a poem...
I'M SERIOUS...
you could title it...
comments on a bic wielding crazy woman's poetry from a lucky charms eatin' feller who writes great poetry...
WORKS FOR ME!
thanks handsome! you are too sweet!
Blessings! Tammy -
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Your poetry inspires.
I just listen.
Thank you.
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Ah - this shows such an emotional situation..excellent story told with this prompt - wonderful take, great metaphor
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